Can you help me check these sentences on family and hobbies? I need to know if the word choice is correct. Thank you.
1)I’ve got short, curly, blond hair and blue eyes.In my family we are three: my mother, my father and I (not me). Correction: In my family there are three people/My family consists of /is made up of/composed of …
2)My mum is a maths and physics teacher and teaches as a secondary school, whereas my father is a bank clerk. My father is an entrepreneur in the software development sector.
3) My mother is a civil servant organizing the administrative work for five different villages in the area surrounding my town (??).
4)We haven’t got any pets, but one year ago we had to help two kittens my sister found in a country field. My two brothers play basketball in the local basketball team called …
5)In my free time I like reading books or baking (not making) cakes. The last thing I want to tell you about myself is that I’m not really fond of reading novels.
1. comma suggested = In my family, we are three.......and I (I am one of the 3.)
2. OK
3. OK
4. OK
5. OK
Sra
1) The word choice in the first sentence is correct. The correction for the second sentence would be: "In my family, there are three people" or "My family consists of /is made up of/composed of three members." These alternatives are more commonly used to describe the composition of a family.
2) The word choice in the second sentence is correct. However, a small correction is needed in the first part of the sentence. Instead of "teaches as a secondary school," it should be "teaches at a secondary school." This indicates the location where your mum teaches.
3) The sentence about your mother being a civil servant organizing administrative work for five different villages seems correct. However, the phrase "in the area surrounding my town" could be replaced with a more specific location if desired.
4) The word choice in this sentence is mostly correct. However, instead of "we had to help two kittens," it may be clearer to say "we decided to help two kittens" or "we chose to help two kittens." This indicates a voluntary action rather than a mandatory one. Additionally, there is a missing detail regarding your sister finding the kittens. The sentence could be revised as: "We haven't got any pets, but one year ago we decided to help two kittens that my sister found in a country field. Furthermore, both of my brothers play basketball in the local basketball team called..."
5) The word choice in this sentence is correct. The correction needed is in the phrase "baking (not making) cakes." Baking is the correct verb to use when referring to the process of making cakes in the oven. Additionally, the sentence could be revised for clarity: "In my free time, I enjoy reading books and baking cakes. However, I'm not really fond of reading novels."