COuld you please help me re word this sentence-
Social media sites have affected commerce because people can advertise to thousands of people all at once through different sites.
Social media websites have influenced commerce greatly because vendors can advertise to thousands of people all at once through different websites.
Can you help me re do this paragraph that I did. I keep looking over it an am not happy but can not think of anyway to change it.
Convergence in the context of media refers to the technology driven unification of different media channels. Media convergence allows mass media professionals to tell and present information and entertainment using a variety of media. Convergence is part of a much broader change in the media that is being brought about by new technology. For many years different media were clearly separated: broadcast TV, broadcast radio, newspapers, books, video and film, recorded music etc. Media convergence is a phenomenon as revolutionary to communication as the invention of movable type or electronic communication. Media convergence is always evolving, but its best application likely will be with computers, utilizing the endless capabilities of the Internet.
http://www.google.com/search?q=%22Media+convergence+allows+mass+media+professionals+%22&hl=en&num=10&lr=&ft=i&cr=&safe=images&tbs=
I take it you need to paraphrase what someone else has written. YOU need to do that, and then someone here will check it for you.
Here are some ideas about how to go about paraphrasing someone else's ideas. And don't forget to add the correct citation -- you need to cite sources that you quote, paraphrase, or summarize.
http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&lr=&q=how+to+paraphrase+a+paragraph&oq=how+to+paraphrase&aq=6&aqi=g10&aql=&gs_sm=c&gs_upl=113820l118085l0l121511l17l14l0l4l4l0l449l3227l0.2.3.1.4l10l0
I have done all of this and the above paragraph is what I came up with, but to me it still does not look right. This is my own work and I have already sent it through plagiarism and it came back with 3%. Now I am needing someone's help.
The above paragraph is plagiarized. Please take the time to read and use the ideas in the link I posted above.
Certainly! Here's a rephrased version of your sentence:
The impact of social media on commerce is significant as it enables individuals to advertise simultaneously to a large audience across various platforms.
To reword a sentence effectively, consider the following steps:
1. Identify the key elements of the original sentence: In this case, we have "social media sites," "affected commerce," "people can advertise," and "thousands of people all at once through different sites."
2. Simplify the sentence structure: Rearrange the sentence to make it clearer and more concise. Start with the subject (social media sites) and follow with the main verb (have affected), adding the specifics afterward.
3. Use appropriate synonyms and modifiers: Choose alternative phrases or words with a similar meaning to enhance the sentence. For instance, replace "because" with "as it enables" to show causation.
4. Focus on clarity and precision: Make sure the reworded sentence conveys the intended message clearly and accurately, maintaining the original idea while improving the wording.
By following these steps, you can reword any sentence effectively.