concude refuting paragraph

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i don't know what to do on this one.
my teacher told that i need to get the readers attention again back to my thesis which is girls are better friends than men.

here's the paragraph.

However, some people think that men are better in handling friendships. Even though men are less emotional than women, they form strong friendship through activities like sports and their job. Also, men are rational; their focus is to be better at everything and not to focus problems.

  • concude refuting paragraph -

    The generalizations you are making are really bad.

    "men are less emotional than women" -- really? You have checked with every single man on the planet and came up with this?

    "they form strong friendship... " -- really? All men??

    Etc.

  • concude refuting paragraph -

    it's only my opinion ms sue.

  • concude refuting paragraph -

    write teacher sorry

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