I need to simplify and clarify sentences number 1 and 3. Can you check the word choice (ex. impose) in the other sentences, too?
1)The Victorians were great moralizer: they faced a large number of problems on such a scale, that they felt obliged to so they promoted a code of values that reflected the world as they wanted it to be, not as it really was, based on personal duty, hard work, respectability and charity. 2.These values were established during the reign of Queen Victoria, who ruled constitutionally from 1837 to 1901.
3) These values were refined by the upper and the middle classes, who held the political and economical power, but they were equally applicable to all strata of society.
4) The idea of pride was connected with the concept or racial superiority.
5) There (?) emerged a powerful belief that the races of the world wer divided by fundamental physical and intellectual differences, that some were destined to be led by others.
6) It was thus an obligation imposed by God on the British to impose (??) their superior way of life as well as their institutions on native peoples throughout the world. The expansion the empire was therefore regarded as a mission.
1. The Victorians were great moralizers: They faced a large number of societal problems, so they promoted a code of values that reflected the world not as it was, but as they wanted it to be, based on personal duty, hard work, respectability and charity.
2. These values were established during the reign of Queen Victoria, who ruled constitutionally from 1837 to 1901.
3. These values were refined by the upper and the middle classes, who held the political and economic power, but these values were equally applicable to all strata of society.
4. The idea of pride was connected with the concept or racial superiority.
5) A powerful belief emerged that the races of the world were divided by fundamental physical and intellectual differences, that some people were destined to be led by others.
6. It was thus seen as an obligation thrust by God on the British to impose their superior way of life, as well as their institutions, on native peoples throughout the world. The expansion of the empire was, therefore, regarded as a mission.
Read and compare yours and mine VERY CAREFULLY so you catch everything.
1) The Victorians were great moralizers: they faced numerous significant problems and felt compelled to promote a code of values that portrayed the world as they wished it to be, rather than how it truly was. These values were based on personal duty, hard work, respectability, and charity.
To simplify and clarify the sentence, we can break it down into smaller parts:
- "The Victorians were great moralizers" --> The Victorians had a strong inclination towards moralizing.
- "they faced a large number of problems on such a scale" --> they encountered numerous significant problems.
- "that they felt obliged to so they promoted a code of values" --> that compelled them to promote a set of values.
- "reflected the world as they wanted it to be, not as it really was" --> that portrayed the world as they desired it, rather than its actual state.
3) These values were refined by the upper and middle classes, who held political and economic power, but applied to all social strata equally.
To simplify and clarify the sentence:
- "These values were refined by the upper and middle classes" --> The upper and middle classes further developed these values.
- "who held the political and economic power" --> who had political and economic influence.
- "but they were equally applicable to all strata of society" --> yet these values applied equally to all social classes.
For the other sentences, we can check the word choice and suggest alternative options:
4) The concept of pride was associated with the belief in racial superiority.
- Instead of "connected," we can use "associated" to clarify the relationship between pride and the belief.
5) There emerged a widespread belief that the races of the world were divided by innate physical and intellectual differences, with some destined to lead others.
- Instead of "divided," we can use "separated" or "classified."
- Instead of "fundamental," we can use "innate" to indicate the belief in inherent differences.
6) It was thus an obligation imposed by God on the British to impose their superior way of life and institutions on native peoples worldwide. The expansion of the empire was viewed as a mission.
- Instead of repeating "impose" twice, we can use "force" or "impose" in the first instance and rephrase the second part as "imposing their superior way of life and institutions."
- Instead of "emerged," we can use "developed" or "arose."
- Instead of "throughout the world," we can use "worldwide."