Down below is the other path I have written about.
Could you please check to see if it covers all these factors.
- cost of living on your own
-factors that add to your achievement in the workplace
-educational attainment and earning potential
-current skills and talents and your future route
-benefits/opportunities available to those with post-secondary education
-opportunity trade-offs in leaving school before graduation
A day of my life with post secondary education.......
Everything seems so magical; I have been able to reach a very high stage in my life. By keeping myself attached to my work, my learning outcomes have proved to be a success. I have gotten good grades in school and have graduated with a high school diploma in my hand. I have entered university, and I’m ready to receive post secondary education. If I had not been able to pass my classes at high school I would have never gotten an opportunity like this, as you need to pass classes to obtain credits, which I have. These credits are a very handy tool. These good grades have also helped me in getting full scholarships and I have received my student loan which I will use for being given education at university. I also have a part time job at a grocery store, and my earning potential is great is great, my level of education is high, therefore my earning potential is also high and will increase as my level of education increases. I have used that income and deposited in my savings account. My family has also made an RESP for me, so that counts for great education. At my part time job, I don’t like being average, it’s always best to stand out of the crowd, which I try my best to do. I put in extra hours in my work without having to do overtime. I also like being accountable, it’s good to admit to your mistake when you’re wrong, and I tell this to my co-workers all the time. My positive attitude brightens everything, I am confident with what whatever I accomplish. My good behaviour has made me receive good points, unlike some of my other co-workers who choose to gossip and not put any of their focus in their work. University is great; I have my passion towards Science, and I’m choosing to do a career of a pharmacist. Post secondary education is great; it is additional education that gives you more career opportunities. My desire as I have mentioned before is to become a pharmacist, and only post secondary education can provide me with the skills and knowledge I need for this occupation. Post secondary education has allowed me to gain knowledge which has helped me to deal with life experiences as well as the obstacles life brings my way. It has put me in a social environment and has given me the opportunity to meet new and interesting people and has allowed me to go through experiences that will help me gain the independence I need to handle tough situations. It has helped to open door and choices for me in my future. Earning a post secondary degree is the stepping-stone which will allow me to achieve a life-long goal. I certainly cannot wait to achieve my university diploma, university degree, and trade certification.
Sara -- I think you've missed the point of this part of your essay.
As I understand it, you're to project yourself into the time you're about 30 or so -- a few years after you've completed your post-secondary education.
What job do you see yourself doing?
business manager? teacher? nurse? accountant? social worker? or????
Describe a day in your life at that time.
Oh.. okay so something like this:
A day of my life with post secondary education.......
Everything seems so magical; I have been able to reach a very high stage in my life. By keeping myself attached to my work, my learning outcomes have proved to be a victory. I got good grades in school and have been able to successfully graduate with a high school diploma in my hand. I remember my first steps in university; post secondary education has allowed me to gain knowledge which has helped me to deal with life experiences as well as the obstacles life brings my way. It has put me in a social environment and has given me the opportunity to meet new and interesting people and has allowed me to go through experiences that will help me gain the independence I need to handle tough situations. It has helped to open door and choices for me in my future. I had a great passion to do my career for a Pharmacist, and luckily after attending university, and receiving post secondary education, I have been able to obtain the skills and knowledge that I needed for this occupation. I am only a few steps away from becoming what I want.
This would be better if you wrote about a day in your life as a pharmacist.
Okay....so something like this:
A day of my life with post secondary education.......
Everything seems so perfect; I have been able to reach a very high stage in my life. By keeping myself attached to my work, my learning outcomes have proved to be a victory. I got good grades in school and have been able to successfully graduate with a high school diploma in my hand. I remember my first steps in university; post secondary education allowed me to gain knowledge which helped me to deal with life experiences as well as the obstacles life brings my way. It put me in a social environment and gave me the chance to meet new and interesting people and allowed me to go through experiences that helped me gain the independence I needed to handle tough situations. It opened a door for me where I could choose from a variety of choices. My passion was to become a Pharmacist, and by receiving this post secondary education, I gained the skills and knowledge to step into this occupation. I am what I had hoped to become. My occupation as a Pharmacist has settled. My earning potential is very high, and I have started saving this money into my RRSP. I share the same qualities as I did before, when I worked at a grocery store. My attitude is positive towards everything, and I enjoy my job.
I am in prison. Sad right? Well I have goals for myself. Ironic as it is I would like to be a criminal defense attorney. I messed up once and I turned myself in for it and now I want to make things right. =)
Based on the provided information, it appears that the path you have written about covers several factors related to post-secondary education and its impact on different aspects of your life.
1. Cost of living on your own: The mention of working a part-time job and saving income for the future indicates an understanding of the financial implications of living independently while pursuing higher education.
2. Factors that add to your achievement in the workplace: The emphasis on standing out at the part-time job, taking accountability, and maintaining a positive attitude demonstrates an understanding of the qualities that contribute to success in the workplace.
3. Educational attainment and earning potential: The recognition of the correlation between higher education level and increased earning potential exemplifies an understanding of the long-term benefits of post-secondary education in terms of career advancement and financial stability.
4. Current skills and talents and your future route: The mention of having a passion for science and aspiring to become a pharmacist showcases awareness of one's interests and the importance of aligning educational choices with future career goals.
5. Benefits/opportunities available to those with post-secondary education: The acknowledgment that post-secondary education provides more career opportunities demonstrates an understanding of the advantage that additional education can bring in terms of expanding career prospects.
6. Opportunity trade-offs in leaving school before graduation: While not explicitly discussed in the provided text, the overall tone emphasizes the value and benefits of completing post-secondary education, suggesting an awareness of the trade-offs that may arise from leaving school before graduation.
Overall, the path you have written about covers most of the mentioned factors relating to post-secondary education and its impact on various aspects of life.