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I writing a 6 page research paper on "Teen Pregnancy", and i know my introduction pharagh should grab the readers attention, as well as the first sentence but I cant really think of any thing good or interesting. My three main topic are Birth rates, Consequences, and prevention. I also wrote my thesis sentences which is How does teen pregnancy prevention stop the birth rates, and consequences of teen pregnancy?.........Can someone please!!

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    #1. DON'T start any paper's first draft by writing the introduction! How can you introduce a paper that you haven't written yet?

    Follow the writing process -- completely:

    Prewriting: Brainstorm, research, plan, outline, thesis statement

    Writing: Write first draft by starting with section II of your outline; write the introduction after the body of the paper is written; write the conclusion last.

    Polishing: Revise, concentrating first on the body of the paper, then the intro, then the concl (revision = making sure ideas are logical and sequential and support your thesis); proofread (spelling, grammar, usage, etc.)

    Do you have a thesis yet? Have you done your brainstorming (and maybe research) yet? Have you written an outline?

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/catalogue.html#org
    from http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/catalogue.html

    http://www.angelfire.com/wi/writingprocess/

    http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/
    Check in the Essay & Research Paper Level.

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    #2. That's not a thesis statement. It's a question from which a thesis statement can be drawn.

    Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

    http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/06/21/5-tips-on-how-to-write-a-strong-thesis-statement/
    Read carefully and follow ALL directions.

    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
    This is one of the very best places I've seen online to help students write good thesis statements. It shows you sentences that aren't thesis statements and how to turn each one into real thesis statements.

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    Please post a true thesis statement and the outline you have to support that statement. Then someone may be able to help you.

    In addition, this may help you:
    http://www.ipl.org/div/aplus/
    Follow the Step by Step guide.

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    Here's my outline:


    Teen Pregnancies
    History
    • Using adolescent birth rates to measure teen pregnancy, adolescent parenthood has been a fairly common experience throughout American history.
    • Between 1972 and 1991, the teen pregnancy rate rose steadily; in 1991, 11.5% of 15-19 year old women in the United States became pregnant, the nation’s highest rate of teen pregnancy ever.
    • The most recent American teen birth rate of approximately 51.1 births per 1,000
    • adolescent females is consistent with historical trends and matches the 1920 figure.

    Thesis
    Teen Pregnancy Prevention does help stop a lot of the teen birth rates, and consequences.

    3 Main Topics
    • Birth Rates
    • Teen Pregnancy Consequences
    • Teen pregnancy Prevention

    Conclusion
    In Conclusion these are the facts about teen pregnancies, birth rate, consequences, and preventions. Knowing how hard it can be changes most people’s point of views on having a baby while still a teen. Waiting is good, especially if you’re still in school. Never call an unexpected child a “mistake”, it doesn’t make the situation any better.

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    NOT A THESIS: Teen Pregnancy Prevention does help stop a lot of the teen birth rates, and consequences.

    Please read the links above and my directions for writing a thesis. This is a statement of fact. It is not a thesis.

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    Ugh!!!! This is killing ME!!

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    Listen to me.

    What is it about this topic that you want to prove -- even to people who would disagree with you?

    Your thesis statement is straight facts. There's no "you" in that statement nor in your outline (and undoubtedly not in your paper either).

    Until you figure out what YOUR STANCE is about this topic, you'll just be regurgitating facts that anyone can find and no one disagrees with.

    WHAT DO YOU THINK?

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    Is this any better:

    Abstaining is the only certain way to prevent teenage pregnancy.

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    Excellent!!!

    Now how will you alter your outline to support that statement. What a good revision!! =)

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    Thank you, it took me long enough!

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    The concept behind thesis statements is not an easy one. But once you've got it, you've got it!!

    Congratulations! Now go and build your paper around it!

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    ok thank you so much!!:)

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