When a heart brakes, some time it makes the people a negative person, who thinks every one is a reason of his or her failure life he afraid of being decline again in his life. He tries to protect himself and make a wall around himself where no one can reach to his heart and his bitterness could not overcome to any thing.

Is this paragraph's english is good?
what i need to change.

When a person's heart breaks, sometimes he becomes a negative person who thinks only of the reasons why he thinks he's a failure in life. He becomes afraid of even more failure in his life. He tries to protect himself and build a wall around himself so no one can reach his heart, and his bitterness cannot be overcome.

There were so many errors in there, but overall I think I could figure out what you meant to say/write. Make sure you compare your paragraph with mine so you note the changes I made. Also make sure you don't simply copy and paste my paragraph and turn it in. Your teacher won't believe it!

Thank yo so much :0

You're welcome. Keep on studying and you'll do well!

The English in this paragraph is better but still needs some improvements. Here are the suggested changes:

"When a heart breaks, sometimes it makes a person become negative. They may start believing that everyone is to blame for their failed life, and they become fearful of experiencing rejection again. They try to protect themselves by constructing walls around their heart, preventing anyone from getting close, and allowing bitterness to pervade everything."

1. Change "some time it makes the people" to "sometimes it makes a person."
2. Change "a negative person, who thinks every one" to "become a negative person who thinks everyone."
3. Change "is a reason of his or her failure life" to "is the reason for their failed life."
4. Change "he afraid of being decline again in his life" to "they are afraid of facing rejection in their life again."
5. Change "bitterness could not overcome to any thing" to "bitterness overwhelms everything."

These changes will make the paragraph flow more smoothly and convey the intended message more clearly.