How can I fix this sentence?
Nurse Julie does not meet my mom’s expectations because Julie does not spend her extra time to keep in touch with my mom and show her interest in talking with my mom
How many different ways do you need to state this same set of thoughts? It seems this has already been answered, more than once.
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To fix this sentence, you can make it more concise and clear. Here's a revised version:
"Nurse Julie fails to meet my mom's expectations because she doesn't invest her extra time in maintaining regular communication and expressing interest in conversing with her."
To fix this sentence yourself, follow these steps:
1. Identify the main ideas in the sentence: Nurse Julie not meeting mom's expectations, lack of effort in keeping in touch and showing interest.
2. Divide the sentence into separate clauses based on these main ideas.
3. Use clear and concise language to express each clause.
4. Arrange the clauses in a logical and coherent manner.
5. Revise and proofread the sentence to ensure it conveys the intended meaning accurately.