ok thanks
now how does my introduction looks?
In the short story Trifles by Susan Glaspell, describes a wife who slowly loses her identity and conforms her husband’s wishes, which leads her killing to kill her husband. When the Attorney and sheriff come to investigate the murder they view the wife as trifling. Because the house is not in order they immediately begin to judge her-not her husband. The Theme of the story is based on the power of observation between the men, women and the role they play in society. Minnie Wright acted out of rage and lost her sanity because of isolation, gender difference and her unhappy marriage.
In (DELETE "IN.") the short story(COMMA) "Trifles" by Susan Glaspell, describes a wife who slowly loses her identity and conforms her husband’s wishes, which leads her killing to kill her husband. When the Attorney (NO CAPS) and sheriff come to investigate the murder (COMMA) they view the wife as trifling. Because the house is not in order (COMMA) they immediately begin to judge her — not her husband. The Theme (NO CAPS) of the story is based on the power of observation between the men,(NO COMMA, "AND.") women and the role they play in society. Minnie Wright acted out of rage and lost her sanity because of isolation, gender difference(S) and her unhappy marriage. (I ASSUME MINNIE IS THE WIFE, BUT I AM NOT SURE. NAME HER AT THE BEGINNING OF THE PARAGRAPH.)
Caps are for contrast only.
You need to review your use of commas.
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/607/02/
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other persons are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Another option, if it is available on your computer, is to have the computer read it to you.
Also, make use of "Spelling and Grammar" under "Tools" in word processing program.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts
Your introduction provides a brief overview of the short story "Trifles" by Susan Glaspell and introduces some of the main themes. However, there are a few improvements that can be made to enhance the clarity and flow of the paragraph.
Revised introduction:
"In the short story "Trifles" by Susan Glaspell, the gradual loss of identity and conformity to her husband's wishes pushes the protagonist, a wife, to the point of committing murder. When the Attorney and sheriff arrive to investigate the crime, they dismissively view the wife's actions as trifling. By focusing on the disorder in the house rather than the husband's behavior, the men quickly pass judgment. The central theme of the story revolves around the power of observation, particularly in the context of gender roles and societal expectations. Minnie Wright's rage, descent into madness, and eventual act of violence can be attributed to her isolation, gender differences, and an unhappy marriage."
Explanation:
1. Provide a clear summary: In the first sentence, you establish the primary focus of the story and mention the wife's transformation and the murder committed. This gives the reader an immediate understanding of the main events.
2. Transition between story overview and investigation: Instead of abruptly mentioning the arrival of the Attorney and sheriff, the revised introduction smoothly introduces their presence and emphasizes their dismissive attitude towards the wife's actions.
3. Expand on the theme: The original introduction briefly mentioned the theme of power observation, but it lacked clarification. The revised introduction elaborates on this theme, specifically highlighting gender roles and societal expectations.
4. Finalize with the causes: In the last sentence of the revised introduction, you connect Minnie Wright's actions to three key factors: isolation, gender differences, and an unhappy marriage, clearly stating their influence on her behavior.