Could somone check my grammar for me. I am not the best and could use some help. Thanks.
• Imagine yourself as a current member of your selected group, and consider the following question: Would I want to immigrate to the United States, and why? Think about what opinion you would have of the immigration process, including naturalization, the costs, fingerprinting, and so forth.
• Consider whether the process would seem easy or difficult for you as an immigrant. After you have thought about your answers, proceed to the next step of this CheckPoint.
Post a 200- to 300-word summary that answers all of the following questions:
Should United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants?
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest?
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? (Feltey, 2006, p. 11)
Should United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants? I do feel the government of the United States should favor any kind of immigrants. This country was built on all different kinds of people, nationality, and religion. Who are we to say who gets to come over and who don’t. I think the applications the government makes immigrants fill out it a good thing because that’s how they can decide; they can bring over the ones that are willing to help make a different in our country, not someone that wants a free ride.
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest? On the most talented and the most rich, I would have to say no. I don’t believe being rich, talented, smartest, or any thing else has anything to do with getting a citizenship. Know with the neediest, I would have to say yes, well some what yes. If there is a mother or father that has a family over here, (like their spouse or children) then yes, a citizenship preference should be given. I think keeping their family together is important.
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? Yes, I do agree on this to a point. I believe in the phrase “First Come First Served”, but if we didn’t give other countries priority at time then we will have more immigrants then others. We need to even out the immigration population. If the government didn’t do priority than no one else would get to come. They can’t just let 500 European come over before the Irish just because they where on the list first. I think it would be good to choose so many from each country each time to be fair.
Should United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants? I do feel the government of the United States should favor any kind of immigrants.<~~this sentence doesn't make sense This country was built on all different kinds of people, nationality, and religion.<~~the word "people" is plural, so make "nationality" and "religion" plural to match Who are we to say who gets to come over and who don’t.<~~... and who doesn't (needs singular form); also needs a question mark at the end of this I think the applications the government makes immigrants fill out it<~~delete "it" and insert a verb a good thing because that’s how they<~~who are "they"? can decide<~~can decide what?; they<~~who? can bring over the ones that are willing to help make a different<~~use "difference" (noun), not "different" (adj) in our country, not someone that<~~use "who" not "that" when referring to people wants a free ride.
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest? On the most talented and the most rich, I would have to say no. I don’t believe being rich, talented, smartest, or any thing<~~sp? else has anything to do with getting a<~~delete "a" citizenship. Know<~~this doesn't make sense with the neediest, I would have to say yes, well some what yes.<~~this is something of a run-on If there is a mother or father that has a family<~~delete "a" over here,<~~move this comma to AFTER the closing parentheses~~> (like their<~~pronoun/antecedent mismatch spouse or children) then yes, a citizenship preference should be given. I think keeping their family together is important.
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? Yes, I do agree on this to a point. I believe in the phrase “First Come First Served”,<~~put comma before the end quotation mark but if we didn’t give other countries priority at time then we will have more immigrants then others.<~~these two sentences don't make sense We need to even out the immigration population.<~~"even out" in terms of what?
There are so many errors in the following, I'd be doing you no favors to continue as if with a fine-toothed comb -- you need to start finding them yourself!
If the government didn’t do priority than no one else would get to come. They can’t just let 500 European come over before the Irish just because they where on the list first. I think it would be good to choose so many from each country each time to be fair.
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Please go over your paper with the following in mind. Thanks to PsyDAG for the following:
In the future, if nobody is available to proofread your work, you can do this yourself. After writing your material, put it aside for a day — at least several hours. (This breaks mental sets you might have that keep you from noticing problems.) Then read it aloud as if you were reading someone else's work. (Reading aloud slows down your reading, so you are less likely to skip over problems.)
[You can also either read it aloud to someone else or have someone else read it aloud to you! (The latter works really well!)]
If your reading goes smoothly, that is fine. However, wherever you "stumble" in your reading, other people are likely to have a problem in reading your material. Those "stumbles" indicate areas that need revising.
Once you have made your revisions, repeat the process above. Good papers often require many drafts.
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And here are three really good websites that will help, too.
http://blog.eduify.com/index.php/2009/10/28/editing-secrets-everyone-should-know/
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http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/proofing.htm
Here is a revised version of your grammar:
• Imagine yourself as a current member of your selected group, and consider the following question: Would I want to immigrate to the United States, and why? Think about what opinion you would have of the immigration process, including naturalization, costs, fingerprinting, and so forth.
• Consider whether the process would seem easy or difficult for you as an immigrant. After you have thought about your answers, proceed to the next step of this CheckPoint.
Post a 200- to 300-word summary that answers all of the following questions:
Should the United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants?
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest?
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? (Feltey, 2006, p. 11)
Should United States government policy favor certain kinds of immigrants? I do feel that the government of the United States should favor any kind of immigrants. This country was built on all different kinds of people, nationalities, and religions. Who are we to say who gets to come over and who doesn’t? I think the applications the government makes immigrants fill out are a good thing because that’s how they can decide; they can bring over the ones that are willing to help make a difference in our country, not someone that wants a free ride.
Should citizenship preference be given to the neediest applicants? The most talented? The most oppressed? The richest? In terms of the most talented and the most rich, I would have to say no. I don’t believe being rich, talented, smartest, or anything else has anything to do with getting citizenship. However, when it comes to the neediest applicants, I would say yes, to some extent. If there is a mother or father with family already in the United States (like their spouse or children), then yes, citizenship preference should be given. I believe in keeping families together as an important factor.
Should applications from certain countries be given priority? Yes, I do agree with this to a certain point. I believe in the phrase "First Come First Served", but if we didn't give other countries priority at times, then we would have more immigrants from some countries than others. We need to balance the immigration population. If the government didn't prioritize, then no one else would get the chance to come. They can't just let 500 Europeans come over before the Irish just because they were on the list first. I think it would be fair to choose a certain number of immigrants from each country each time.