English

posted by .

Can you check these sentences for me, please? Thank you very much in advance.

1) Beowulf and the Dragon wrestle amid sheets of fire. As the flames billow, Beowulf's companions rush away in terror.
2) Only one, Wiglaf, feels enough loyalty to come to the aid of his king.
3) Wiglaf, Beowulf's servant, urges him to bear these things in mind.First, he reminds him of saying long ago in his youth that he would never give up fighting ("he would never allow his glory to abate").
4)Then he spurs him to defend his life with all his strength. In his turn, Wiglaf swears he would rather die than return home without having helped his bold leader.
5) Wiglaf addresses him as bold-tempered chieftain, famed for his deeds (OR: Wiglaf refers to him as a bold and brave chieftain, renowned/famous for his deeds)
6) After uttering these words, the dragon emerges from (whrathfully?) the earth again and attacks Beowulf a second time. The dragon is described as a worm, a terrible visitant who is trying to find his foes in a surge of flame. (" He sought out his foes in a surge of flames the hated men")

  • English -

    #3 leave out "long ago". "in his youth " is sufficient.

    #5. The first sentence is fine.

    #6. Put "emerges wrathfully from the earth and attacks Beowulf a second time."
    "a second time" and "again" are redundant.
    The rest of it is fine! You are improving. Just remember fewer words, greater clarity.

Respond to this Question

First Name
School Subject
Your Answer

Similar Questions

  1. emglish

    Bravery in Beowulf Create a narrative poem in the Anglo saxon style of beowulf,is this right Bravery is like a very trusted friend, it will never let you down. That statement holds true in the great epic of "Beowulf." "Beowulf" is …
  2. English

    I forgot to include the following statements. I really hope you can correct them, too. 1)"The fleetness of the serpent wound itself together ": the serpent quickly (?
  3. English

    Thank you writeacher for your corrections! These are the very last sentences for you to check. 1) An epic contains formulas, that is, conventional expressions easy to remember, and kennings, which are metaphorical expressions. Beowulf …
  4. English

    I still hae a few doubts on the Beowulf as well as on street directions. I really hope you can check these sentences. 1) The breath of the dragon flared up and the ground boomed. 2) Beowulf summoned the strength to swing his sword …
  5. English

    Thank you very much for your corrections! Can you please tell me if the following sentences are possible or mean the same?
  6. English

    Thank you very, very much for your last corrections! Can you tell me if the following expressions are possible and therefore correct?
  7. English

    Can you check if the following sentences are possible in English?
  8. English

    Can you please check my sentences? Thank you. I'd rather you went to bed early tonight. 2) I'm used/was used to drinking a lot of water in the morning. 3) I'd rather go to the dentist today than tomorrow. 4) He asked me if I could
  9. English

    Can you help me check the following sentences I'm doubtful about?
  10. English

    From Beowulf "the battle with the dragon" and " the death of Beowulf" which of these names the protagonist/atagonist relationship in the battle with the dragon?

More Similar Questions