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This is my introductory paragraph.

The Industrial Revolution was a period from the eighteenth to the nineteenth century where major changes in agriculture, manufacturing, mining and transport had a massive effect on the social, economic and cultural conditions starting in the United Kingdom, then spreading throughout Europe, North America, and eventually the world. The Industrial Revolution marked a major turning point to Human history; nearly every aspect of daily life was eventually influenced in some way.

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    The Industrial Revolution was a period from the eighteenth to the nineteenth century during which major changes in agriculture, manufacturing, mining<~~add comma and transport had a massive effect on the social, economic<~~add comma and cultural conditions starting in the United Kingdom, then spreading throughout Europe, North America, and eventually the world. The Industrial Revolution marked a major turning point in human history; nearly every aspect of daily life was eventually influenced in some way.

    So -- where's your thesis statement? All of this is factual. What is your position or stance ... your opinion about these facts?

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    Remember: Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your position on the topic, it isn't a true thesis statement. So think of this sentence as the angle you want to take on the topic and what you intend to prove by the end of your paper. (If your statement is simply factual, then there's nothing to prove!)

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