posted by layla .
how about this for starters?
The shift from being a high school student to a college student can be both pleasurable and discomforting at the same time for the simple fact that college is nothing like high school. In college there are no “boundaries”, telling the students what they can and cannot do. In college everyone has their freedom, one is free to come and go as they please. In high school, students are required to go to class, required to do homework, and required to do what it takes to graduate. In an essence high is a continuation of elementary and middle school, college is quite the contrary, everything learned in college is to prepare one for a life in the career they choose. College is dissimilar from high school, college is mature .Students are no longer bayed, there is a new found independence, and interaction with other people is no longer limited.
No way to tell until we see at least an OUTLINE of the paper you plan to write.
Follow the writing process.
One thing you are struggling with it construction in comparing HS and college. Pick a theme and develop it, don't go wading in the marshes on other things.
It would benefit you to read the first say 10 paragraphs of Twain here:
Then note this: He lays out the argument in simple terms, but developes each with language which makes that point.
You can do the same, but first, decide what you want to say.
Organize it into an outline with a theme, as Twain demonstrates.