Can you check if my rephrasing of Emily Dickinson's poem (The wind tapped like a tired man") is correct?
1) The wind tapped (or hit his fingers lightly) like a tired man (on the poet's door??) and she, like a host, invited him to enter
2) To offer him a chair was as impossible as to hand a sofa to the air since the wind was invisible.It was rapid, had no feet and no body to bind him
3) His speech his compared to the "push" (singing) of many humming birds coming form a superior bush
His finger produce a music similar to the tremulous sound blown into the glass.
The wind visited her shortly ("still flitting") and then like a timid man again tapped and left her alone ("twas flurriedly" ?? How can I rephrase this?). She felt alone again
Thank you
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1) The wind lightly knocked like a tired man, and she, like a host, invited him to enter her house
2) To offer him a chair was as impossible as to offer a sofa to the air since the wind was invisible. It moved fast, had no feet and no body to bind him
3) His voice is like the sound of many hummingbirds
coming from a huge bush
His fingers produce a music similar to the tremulous sound blown into the glass.
The wind visited her quickly and then like a timid man, again tapped quickly and left her alone again.
Let's go through your rephrasing of Emily Dickinson's poem line by line to see if it is correct:
1) The wind tapped (or hit his fingers lightly) like a tired man (on the poet's door??) and she, like a host, invited him to enter.
Your rephrasing seems accurate. You captured the idea of the wind tapping as if it were a tired man, and the poet being likened to a host inviting the wind in.
2) To offer him a chair was as impossible as to hand a sofa to the air since the wind was invisible. It was rapid, had no feet and no body to bind him.
Your rephrasing reflects the original idea, suggesting that offering a chair to the wind is as impossible as offering a sofa to the air, due to the wind's invisible and intangible nature.
3) His speech his compared to the "push" (singing) of many humming birds coming form a superior bush. His finger produce a music similar to the tremulous sound blown into the glass.
Your rephrasing captures the comparison between the wind's speech and the "push" or singing sound of many hummingbirds coming from a superior bush. Additionally, you mention the wind's finger producing music, likening it to the tremulous sound blown into the glass. This reflects the original imagery of the poem.
The wind visited her shortly ("still flitting") and then like a timid man again tapped and left her alone ("twas flurriedly" ?? How can I rephrase this?). She felt alone again.
In this section, there is a slight deviation from the original poem. The original phrase "twas flurriedly" is used to describe how the wind left the poet alone. You could rephrase it as "it departed hurriedly" or "it quickly left." This would better reflect the original idea of the wind leaving timidly or hurriedly.
Overall, your rephrasing captures the main ideas and imagery of Emily Dickinson's poem. Well done!