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Various people believe that the building of an Empire provides secure natural resources from taking over territories claimed by other countries. This Ultra-Nationalism can actually begin a war from attempts trying to take over another country, meaning that you will lose additional resources while the country is at war. One example of how building an Empire can result in a war was Germany's attempt to take over Europe. Nazi Germany started to build an Empire in their attempt to claim power over the world. After Germany invaded Poland, both France and Britain declared war on Germany. Many people died and resources were lost on both sides of this war. Another example of how the building of an empire leads to war is the Japanese expansion into S.E Asia. Due to a high population density, Japan needed more land and natural resources. Japan’s thirst for these resources led it to build an empire. By expanding, Japan started a war with many countries like China. After several years, Japan conquered most of these Pacific countries, but lost its entire empire, the natural resources it was expanding for and many lives when it was attacked by atomic bombs sent by the U.S.A. This concludes that by building an empire, a country is portraying a signal for war.

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    Various people who? believe that the building of an Empire provides for whom? secure natural resources from taking over territories claimed by other countries. This Ultra-Nationalism can actually begin a war from attempts trying to take over another country, meaning that you will lose additional resources while the country is at war. One example of how building an Empire can result in a war was Germany's attempt to take over Europe. Nazi Germany started to build an Empire in their attempt to claim power over the world. After Germany invaded Poland, both France and Britain declared war on Germany. Many people died and resources were lost on both sides of this war. Another example of how the building of an empire leads to war is the Japanese expansion into S.E Asia. Due to a high population density, Japan needed more land and natural resources. Japan’s thirst for these resources led it to build an empire. By expanding, Japan started a war with many countries like China. After several years, Japan conquered most of these Pacific countries, but lost its entire empire, the natural resources it was expanding for and many lives when it was attacked by atomic bombs sent by the U.S.A. This concludes that by building an empire, a country is portraying a signal for war.

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