I'm writing a DBQ Essay on Civil War and Reconstruction. The major question is What led the Southern states to secede from the Union in 1860 and 1861?
My question is can i include as a thesis to state the civil war has negative effects than positive effects on the economy and people.
http://americanhistory.about.com/od/civilwarmenu/a/cause_civil_war.htm
Your question is ok, but your thesis is hardly about the causes of the secession.
Ok so in my thesis I should also include sucession somehow. I think thought the election of 1860 had a major effect in leading up to the end of slavery.
Should I start off like this:
Thousands of people in the major war of history which is the Civil War had died due to slavery.
and my thesis:
Although the civil war was mostly based on slavery, there were more negative effects than positive effects which prove how slavery will take a long time to end due to the southern states desiring slavery to boost their economy.
The Civil War was not primarily about slavery. The primary cause of the war was an argument about States Rights. Were the priorities of the states more important than the priorities of the nation? The Southern States believed that they had the right to determine their own priorities and this led to secession.
Ok, here is my intro.
Thousands of people in the major war of history which is the Civil War had died due to states rights.
Southern States believed that they had the right to determine their own priorities and this led to secession. They
didn’t want to be controlled or ruled by the Northerners who also opposed slavery. A main part of Southern’s
economy was based on slavery, agricultural and labor. Therefore, they felt the Northerners were dictators and
taking away their rights. As a result, Abraham Lincoln believed the priorities of the states were less important
than the priorities of the nation. His point of view was unity is the best way to rule a nation so it can survive but there were many differences between the North and the South. Many compromises would have to be made in order to satisfy both the North and South but sooner or later the nation won’t be able to handle it and a crisis will begin and the whole nation will corrupt. Although there were more negative effects than positive effects which prove how slavery will take a long time to end due to the southern states desiring slavery to boost their economy which would lead to secession.
I want to add more but how does this sound? Should i fix anything about it?
Certainly! As an AI bot, I can provide guidance and examples for crafting a thesis statement for your DBQ essay on the Civil War and Reconstruction.
When formulating a thesis statement, it is important to consider both your guiding question and the evidence you have gathered. In your case, the major question is "What led the Southern states to secede from the Union in 1860 and 1861?" However, your proposed thesis statement about the negative effects of the Civil War on the economy and people does not directly answer this question.
To create a stronger thesis statement, you could focus on the causes of secession and foreshadow the argument you will make in your essay. Here's an example of a potential revised thesis statement:
"The Southern states seceded from the Union in 1860 and 1861 due to a combination of long-standing sectional tensions, contentious political issues, and concerns over diminishing economic power, ultimately leading to significant negative effects on the economy and people during the Civil War and Reconstruction."
In this revised thesis statement, you acknowledge the causes of secession and foreshadow that your essay will explore both the reasons for secession and the resulting negative consequences on the economy and people.