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Any ideas on how to make my thesis stronger or how to change it. My paper is going to be on jacksonian democracy principles, election of 1824, election of 1828, Peggy Eaton Affair, Indian Policy (Worcester vs. Georgia, Trail of tears, Nullification Crisis/Force Act), and the Bank War.

This is the thesis i have. The Jacksonian Era was known as the "The Common Man" and to live up to that, Jackson was willing to fight any challenge that he was faced with.

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    A suggestion was already made regarding that thesis statement.

    http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1257375707

    http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1257428577

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    Yes. I'm aware that the suggestion that I got today was to put Andrew Jackson in the thesis. I do appreciate it. I just wanted to make sure my thesis fit for what I was writing about. Thank You

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    I agree with Writeacher and GuruBlue about what you need to add to your thesis. Be sure to include his full name and title.

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    On note on your content: If you are going to write on Jacksonian democracy principles, the Trail of Tears will be difficult to assimilate into that. It was not, looking back, a complement to Andrew Jackson's legacy.

    I agree with the previous comments on your proposed thesis.

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    That is a good introductory sentence, but not a good thesis statement. The thesis statement should incorporate the specific areas you wish to prove or explore.

    Check this site. It is as clear as possible on good thesis statement writing.

    http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/545/01/

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    Thank You. So what I take from all of your posts is that it's good and to just add his name. Or do I do what GuruBlue said.

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    Do what GuruBlue says. And look at this webpage, too -- note how each poorly written statement was revised into a good thesis statement:
    http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

  • History/Ms.Sue -

    Does this sound better.

    Andrew Jackson's presidency was very nortorious for his democracy principles, election of 1824, election of 1828, Peggy Eaton Affair, Indian Policy, and the war against the United States.

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