english1a- my thesis, is it better?

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Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different things to many people. For some it can mean success or freedom, for others, it can mean having lots of money and luxurious things. In today’s society, almost every person hopes for this dream. But is it possible for each and every person to achieve this dream? Some people go to school, get a well-paying job, and are able to make it to the top while the fortunate ones get there on pure luck. Then there are others who have difficulties climbing the economic ladder and remain at the bottom discovering this dream is nothing more than a myth with endless trials and disappointments. As the rich is getting richer and the poor remains poor, people need to take advantage of opportunities and develop the strength and endurance it takes to reach their dreams; and realize that success does not define a person, but only a person can define success.

  • english1a- my thesis, is it better? -

    I re did my thesis..

    Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different things to many people. For some it can mean success or freedom, for others, it can mean having lots of money and luxurious things. In today’s society, almost every person hopes for this dream. But is it possible for each and every person to achieve this dream? Some people go to school, get a well-paying job, and are able to make it to the top while the fortunate ones get there on pure luck. Then there are others who have difficulties climbing the economic ladder and remain at the bottom discovering this dream is nothing more than a myth with endless trials and disappointments. As the rich is getting richer, society not only needs to realize the true meaning of success, but should also take advantage of opportunities that is available to them so that American can continue to be a richer and stronger country.

  • English1a- my thesis, is it better? -

    You wrote: "As the rich is getting richer, society not only needs to realize the true meaning of success, but should also take advantage of opportunities that is available to them so that American can continue to be a richer and stronger country."

    I think this is worse than the one you wrote before. Take your previous one and streamline it. Ditch this one.

  • english1a- my thesis, is it better? -

    See my post above if you haven't already found it:
    http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1254267756

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