Revise each frag. by attaching it to a related sentence or by recasting it as a full sentence.
Sentences:
1.The first person to produce an artifical dye comercially was William Perkin. A nineteen-year-old Englishman.
2. Many food producers package their products in red. Believing that it attracts consumers.
3.Crayola assigns the colors of crayons unusual names. Including Outer Space and Pig Pink.
4. There are three colors on the Italian flag.Green on the left side, red on the right side, and white in the center.
5. At times, the pigmet saffron as quite popular. And worth its weight in gold.
6. The pigment carmine was in high demand. Spanish conquistadors making vast fortunes on its production.
Answers:
1.William Perkin, a nineteen- year old Englishman was the first to produce an artificial dye commercially.
2. Many food producers believe that in order to attract consumers; they should package products in red.
3. Crayola assigns colors of crayons unusual names, including Outer Space and Pig Pink.
4. On the Italian flag, there are three colors; green on the left side, red on the right side, and white in the middle.
5. At times, the pigment saffron was quite popular, and worth its weight in gold.
6. Spanish conquistadors pigment carmine was in high demand and was making vast fortunes on its production.
The first four are great!
In # 5, omit the commas.
6. Please try this one again.
#1 needs a comma after Englishman.
#2 leave the "that" out' put in order to attract customers at the end of the sentence.
#4 use a colon or a dash instead of a semi-colon
1. The first person to produce an artificial dye commercially was William Perkin. William Perkin, a nineteen-year-old Englishman, achieved this milestone.
2. Many food producers package their products in red because they believe it attracts consumers. The color red is thought to be appealing to customers.
3. Crayola assigns unusual names to the colors of its crayons, such as Outer Space and Pig Pink. Crayola has a unique naming convention for its crayon colors.
4. The Italian flag consists of three colors: green on the left side, red on the right side, and white in the center. The flag of Italy has a specific arrangement of colors.
5. Saffron, a pigment, was quite popular at times and was even worth its weight in gold. There were periods when saffron was highly valued.
6. Spanish conquistadors had a high demand for the pigment carmine and made vast fortunes from its production. The production of carmine was lucrative for Spanish conquistadors.