posted by Jen .
Can anyone tell me if this sound ok?
I have to create an introduction and conclusion. Below is also my thesis statement. Anything you think I can add to it or make it sound more "attention getting"? Thanks for your help :o)
My Thesis statement
“While a smoking ban can have a negative effect on some businesses, smoking should be banned in public places because of health risks to non-smokers.”
Are you aware that smoking is a recognized cause of many diseases and cancers? This essay will argue why smoking should be banned from public places. A smoking ban may have a negative affect on some businesses, but that is a small price to pay for possibly saving someone’s life one day.
In the hopes that one day hospitality workers will be accepting to the smoking ban law, there are many positives to the smoking ban. Many individuals are not tolerant of unwelcome smoke, and that as a collective whole, something can be done to control the issue. A smoking ban would greatly benefit most people, especially those who are non-smokers. A smoking ban would create a better environment and increase a person’s health. Strong research indicates smoking bans are a lifesaver.
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