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is my free verse peom correct? can you check for any errors? thank you.


Sitting On The Beach

Sitting on the beach
Watching the sun set,
It makes me calm.
Sitting on the beach
Watching people walking past,
Holding hands.
Sitting on the beach
Watching the changing tide,
While sitting on the beach.
Listening to the seagulls call
Sitting on the beach,
Watching the sunrise.

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    I think your topic is neat; and I would only change one word in order to keep the poem balanced. You have begun each line with the "ing" form of the verb..... so I would start the 3rd line with "Making". Also use a period at the end.

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