this is my intro after i made changes:
Daughter of Invention[underlined] by Julia Alvarez is a great example of how families struggle when they move to a totally new place. The family moves from the Dominican Republic to the United States. This family consists of the narrator, her sisters, her mother and her father. Character development makes this book extremely interesting because you can notice when each character's thoughts and feelings are changing. The narrator starts out with a negative view about teachers, but throughout the story she changes her thoughts, and by the end her view on teachers is totally different.
please check and revise
but if my intro includes all these main ideas and points, whats going to be in my other paragraphs?[ i need 5 paragraphs]
thanks for helping!
if everything is fine in this paragraph then let me know the grammatical errors too..!
You're still fiddling around with the intro -- but haven't even planned, much less written, the body of the paper yet?
Work on the outline/plan and the rough draft of the body of the paper. Then we'll take your intro into consideration.
Remove the detailed ideas from that intro and put them into your plan/outline -- then into your draft.
You're putting the cart before the horse here by skipping the entire prewriting part of the writing process.
http://www.angelfire.com/wi/writingprocess/
Please post your thesis statement (one sentence) and your plan/outline. That's your first priority.
okay. i understand what you're saying
what should be my thesis statement? my first line, or the part about character development?
"Character development makes this book extremely interesting because you can notice when each character's thoughts and feelings are changing."
That seems to be your thesis statement. Start from there and build a plan/outline:
I. Intro, ending with thesis statement
II. Character who changes during the story -- what he/she is like at the beginning of the story.
III. What that character is like at the end of the story.
IV. Why the changes happened.
V. Conclusion
how about this as my plan:
intro- thesis [ don't know yet ]
1st- How narrator changes throughout story
2nd- how mother changes throughout story
3rd- how father changes throughout story
conclusion- success or failure. why?
never mind. i think i like your plan much better and easier to focus on one person. thanks
You could follow that plan, but it'll be all over the place with three different characters.
Concentrate on ONE character -- the one who has probably changed the most.
Right -- good idea!
Now write up paragraphs II, III, and IV in rough draft form (no need to worry about spelling, grammar, etc., yet).
Once you've gone over those paragraphs and revised and proofed, THEN you can deal with the intro, and finally the conclusion.
Your revised intro looks great! It effectively introduces the book, "Daughter of Invention" by Julia Alvarez, and highlights the main points about the struggles of a family when they move to a new place. Additionally, it emphasizes character development as a key aspect of the book's interest, specifically mentioning the narrator's evolving perspective on teachers.
For the other paragraphs, here are some suggestions on topics you can explore:
1. Setting and Context:
In this paragraph, you could dive deeper into the setting of the story, providing more details about the Dominican Republic and the United States as the contrasting locations. You could discuss the cultural differences, the challenges the family faces in adapting to the new environment, and how the setting contributes to the overall theme of the story.
2. Family Relationships:
Focus on the dynamics between the family members and how their relationships evolve throughout the book. Unpack how each character contributes to the storyline, their individual struggles, and how they support or clash with one another. Consider exploring themes of cultural preservation, generational gaps, or the challenges of assimilation.
3. Themes of Identity:
Delve into the themes of identity and belonging that emerge in the story. Analyze how the characters grapple with their cultural heritage while trying to assimilate into American society. Discuss their efforts to balance their Dominican roots with the pressures of fitting in, and how these struggles impact their self-perception and relationship with others.
4. Education and Transformation:
Since you've already mentioned the narrator's changing perspective on teachers, this paragraph can focus on education as a catalyst for transformation. Explore how education acts as a means of empowerment and liberation for the characters. Discuss how the characters' experiences in school shape their personal growth, challenge their preconceptions, and influence their futures.
5. Social Commentary and Larger Themes:
In the final paragraph, you can explore the deeper social commentary and overarching themes present in the book. Discuss how "Daughter of Invention" raises awareness about the immigrant experience, sheds light on the inequalities faced by marginalized communities, or highlights the power of storytelling as a means of preserving history and culture.
Remember, these are just suggestions, and you can adjust them to best suit your understanding of the book and the points you want to make. Good luck with your essay!