posted by .

I'm writing a thesis statement and wanted someone to check it for me. My topic is about gay adoption, which I agree with. Thesis statement: Gay should be able to adopt because homosexual adoption also solves the problem of shortage of adoptive and foster parents.

  • english -

    Ok, that is an ok thesis statement. However, that is not the most important consideration in adoption. The long term welfare, nuturing, stability,and safety of children are the most important issues in adoption. How does homosexual adoption aid those issues? Isn't those the critical issues on adoption?
    Adoptive parents should be chosen on the main factors, then a much lower ranked criteria is gender orientation. Yes, you can or can not argue that some of those factors (stability) are affected by homosexual lifestyle, but frankly, if you are making the thesis that gender orientation should not be a factor, you ought to be arguing that adoptive parents have a set of important qualities, which may or may not be affected by the gender orientation.

  • English -

    Bobpursley is right. Your thesis statement is OK, but I think an entire paper based on this narrow idea will not be terribly interesting to read.

    If you're going to write a paper about adoption, then focus on the qualities (as Bobpursley stated above) that all adoptive parents should have.

    And here's a really good webpage to use in deciding if your thesis statement is worth its salt!

Respond to this Question

First Name
School Subject
Your Answer

Similar Questions

  1. English

    I have to write a seven page term paper about the History of Ireland (my own choice)for my English class, beginning with a thesis statement. Right now I'm confused as how to write the thesis statement about this topic. Could someone …
  2. English

    I have a question about writing my thesis for my paper. The topic was war as a social disease and the three body paragraphs were Dissection & Numeration, Statement of Conflict/Problem/ and Solution, and Statement of Root Principle?
  3. Thesis statement

    How do I write a thesis statement about why I choose Medical Billing and Coding as a career. I have read what a thesis statement is, but my writing is terrible and I just can't get the understanding of what to include in my thesis …
  4. Com II

    I Would like someone to proofread what I have wrote as a double check I did not miss anything and that it makes sence. Thanks in advance... Here is the question I had to answer. Review the information about thesis statements in the …
  5. English

    Im doing a thesis statement on GAY ADOPTION , and i wanted to know if mine was good so far.. : The majority of states (34) of them , lacks statewide legislation , case law or department regulation addressing gay adoption!
  6. english

    I need help on writing a thesis statement for my informative essay for ENC 1101. I decided to write about adoption and I want to write what the advantages and disadvantages of adoption are. I'm very undecisive on how I should write …
  7. reading and writing

    Which of the following is a common error in composing a thesis statement?
  8. English

    Which of the following is a common error in composing a thesis statement?
  9. english 101

    how would you write a thesis statement on adoption
  10. English

    1. Identify which description below is untrue of a good thesis A. A thesis mentions a broad topic. B. A thesis narrows the broad topic to a single statement C. A thesis very briefly mentions the factors that contribute to the writer’s …

More Similar Questions