posted by Larry .
okay, I need to do a powerpoint for this career "computer animation"
I need help writing a simple, short, punchy paragraph or list. Yet able to get the message across to the audience.
Heres the topic:
You will of course be spending most of your time on a computer. First, cultivating your artistic abilities, then learning how to apply them within the digital world.
The final step of your computer animation training.
Set some time aside just before you graduate to compile a professional-looking demo reel and portfolio. Without this, a company simply won't take the time to investigate your talents further.
Is the first paragraph good enough? Is it suffiecient information for a powerpoint slide? I'm fine with the rest.
Your second sentence is not a sentence. It hangs on a pair of dangling participles. Neither is the third.
Not a good beginning. What message are you trying to get across? I thought (from a previous question) that you were interested in pros and cons about the career.
Pretty rough. Try this:
Animators spend most of their time on a computer: first, cultivating their artistic abilities, then learning how to apply them in the digital world.
Finally, set some time aside just before graduation to compile a professional-looking demonstration reel and portfolio. Without this, a company simply won't take the time to investigate an applicant's talents.