Is this good to say for a thank you letter.
Thank you for the opportunity to visit with you and see your office last Thursday. Both the interview with you and Ms. Robinson made for an exciting and complete day. Thank you for your hospitality during my visit and for all your efforts to arrange my visit. Having seen your company, I am all the more enthused about the career opportunity that Workforce Planning Unit of the Human Resources and Organization offers allowing me to get my foot in the door. I look forward to your decision.
Since I don't know what actually happened, it is hard to evaluate.
Was it merely a "visit" or was it a job interview? If the latter, you might want to delete the multiple references to "visit." I'm not sure what you mean by getting your "foot in the door." does that refer to the interview or a job offer?
You seem to be overdoing it. Did it really make a "complete day" for you? Did they just show their office or did you get a tour of the facility? There is no need to thank her for seeing her office.
Does the decision involve employment or are you being considered for more than one position?
Be more concise. Thank them for the interview, indicate that you appreciate their time and effort and that you are looking forward to working for their company.
I hope this helps. Thanks for asking.
Yes, the content of the thank you letter you provided is appropriate and effective in expressing your gratitude for the opportunity to visit, interview, and see the office. It also emphasizes your enthusiasm for the career opportunity and expresses your eagerness for their decision.
Here are the key elements of a well-crafted thank you letter:
1. Express gratitude: Begin your letter by expressing sincere thanks for the opportunity. This sets a positive tone and shows appreciation for the time and effort invested by the person or organization.
2. Specify the purpose: Clearly state the reason for your gratitude, such as the opportunity to visit, interview, or see their office. This helps the recipient understand the specific event or interaction you are referring to.
3. Highlight positive experiences: Mention any positive experiences or outcomes from the visit or interview. This could include praising the interviewer or acknowledging the hospitality and efforts made by the company to arrange your visit.
4. Emphasize enthusiasm: Share your enthusiasm and excitement about the career opportunity, making it clear that the visit has further strengthened your interest in the position and the company.
5. Closure and anticipation: Conclude the letter by expressing your anticipation for their decision and reiterating your eagerness to move forward in the hiring process.
Remember to personalize the letter by using the recipient's name and engaging with specific details from your visit or interview.