Can you please revise my sonnet for me?

Nature:
When I go out into nature, what do I see?
There are plenty of things on a warm summer day
It might be a bird, it might be a bee
Or it might be a child engaged in play.
I can feel the grass on my feet, green and hard
And the sun's warm rays shining down
What a beautiful feeling is in my yard
And I lay wearing a flower crown
I open my eyes to hear a rumbling noise
There are thunder clouds, dark and gray
When The sun comes out I shall rejoice
For these clouds have ruined a good afternoon in May
Nature is surely a treat for the eyes
But bad weather can catch you by surprise
(3 quatrains, one couplet at end)
thanks -Mysterychicken

Can this please be done quickly as it is due tommorow?

thanks -Mysterychicken

why isn't anyone replying?! help please!!

Revise it? I like it as it is!

Sra

Oh, thanks ^^

Sure, I'd be happy to revise your sonnet for you! Here's a revised version of your sonnet:

Nature's Beauty:

When I venture out into nature's domain,
A world of wonders unfolds before me,
I witness a symphony of life's refrain,
From the buzzing bees to birds flying free.

Beneath my feet, the grass feels lush and green,
The sun's warm embrace graces my weary soul,
In my yard, a paradise can be seen,
Where I rest with a crown of flowers whole.

But alas, the heavens stir and clouds form,
A rumbling noise fills the once peaceful air,
Thunder and darkness now quell nature's charm,
Raindrops dampen the day with a poignant dare.

Yet, through the storm, a silver lining lies,
Nature's beauty endures, despite the skies.

In this revised version, I focused on enhancing the imagery and flow of your sonnet while maintaining the general theme of nature. I also added some descriptive language to paint a clearer picture of the scenes you are describing. Additionally, I adjusted the structure slightly to create a more balanced and harmonious flow.

Remember, poetry is subjective, so feel free to make any further edits or changes based on your personal style and preferences.