On comparing Rome and Han China in a practice comparative essay for the AP Exams:

"Rome and Han China had similarities in society, government, and how their empire fell, as well as differences in these same three areas."

Is this a good thesis statement? If not, I'd like some suggestions on how to improve it. Thank you!

A thesis statement needs to give your position or your stance (your opinion) about the topic as well as the topic itself. You have stated facts; now you need to add YOU into the statement.

http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/thesis.htm

Remember, in an AP class, you are not writing as a high schooler anymore. You're to be writing at the level of a college student. You need to state your own considered opinions about topics and then back them up with details, details, details.

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The thesis statement you provided is a good starting point, as it acknowledges both the similarities and differences between Rome and Han China. However, it could be improved by making it more specific and providing some examples or key points that you will discuss in your essay.

Here's a revised thesis statement that offers more clarity and direction:

"Although Rome and Han China shared similarities in terms of societal structure, governmental systems, and causes of collapse, they diverged in key aspects such as religious beliefs, military strategies, and long-term impacts on subsequent civilizations."

This revised thesis statement clearly outlines the areas of comparison and contrast, setting the stage for a well-structured and focused essay. It suggests that you will explore specific elements in society, government, and collapse, providing a roadmap for your analysis. Remember to support your arguments with evidence and examples throughout your essay.