I just reread your posts from this morning, and I'm confused about a few things:
1. The directions clearly state that you are to write a five-paragraph paper.
"In a five-paragraph essay, discuss which author was more successful in creating a good piece of literature. Use examples from both books to explain your thinking."
Yet you have posted six paragraphs and called it your introduction. All that cannot be an introduction.
2. Then the rubric tells you explicitly what to include in your paper:
And the rubric...
The Student demonstrates an understanding of both books
The student demonstrates judgments about the literary quality of each book
the student supports these judgments with examples from both books
the student prepares an insightful analysis of the literary elements in the books.
3. Yesterday, I gave you a general plan to follow for writing your paper.
http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1216167548
*Paragraph 1 (Introduction) should be about 4-6 sentences long; the last sentence needs to be your thesis statement.
*Paragraphs 2, 3, and 4 should be about 8-10 sentences each. Each of these paragraphs should have a topic sentence, at least three supporting detail sentences for that topic sentence, and at least five or six commentary or interpretation sentences for those detail sentences. You may or may not need a transitional sentence at the end.
*Paragraph 5 (Conclusion) should be about 4-6 sentences and should echo the introduction without simply repeating it.
If you have questions about anything I've written here or in the post from yesterday, be sure to respond.
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1. Based on the information you've provided, it seems that the writer has gone beyond the required five paragraphs for the essay and called it an introduction. This is a mistake since all the explanation and analysis should be spread across the body paragraphs, rather than being contained within the introduction. To address this issue, you can suggest to the writer to revise their essay by condensing the content of their current introduction into a more concise and focused introduction.
2. The rubric indicates specific criteria that need to be addressed in the paper. This includes demonstrating an understanding of both books, making judgments about the literary quality of each book, supporting those judgments with examples from both books, and providing an insightful analysis of the literary elements in the books. It's important to make sure that the writer has covered each of these criteria in their essay. If any of the criteria are missing or not adequately addressed, you can suggest to the writer to revise and add the necessary content to meet the rubric requirements.
3. In your previous communication, you provided a general plan for how to structure the essay. This plan outlined the expected length and content for each paragraph. This guidance can be helpful for the writer to ensure that their essay is well-organized and covers the necessary information. If the writer has any questions about the plan or needs further clarification, encourage them to ask for assistance.