english - revision
posted by rose .
My instructor suggested that I simplify the essay, so I can easily get my point across. Meanwhile, the feedback received from my peer reviewer was valid and will help me better my expository essay. The things that I will put in practice are the following: A statistic that will attract the attention of the audience and to make sure that all terms are more explicit.
The Center For Writing Excellence has suggested changes in grammar and style in order for the paper to be accurate and grammatically correct.
By using these feedbacks, my expository essay will capture and hold the attention of the audience. Also, I chose not to use the feedback on “the material that does not feet the main point of the essay” because in my research I found out that the falling American dollar and credit woes in the secondary mortgage market has a lot to do with the increase of gas and oil prices
Sorry, but what is your question here?