Please if the paragraph flows well, makes sense and if it analyzes why the use of wealth is significant in Claudius's part in Hamlet.
Claudius uses the royal fortune for his own personal needs to satisfy himself. The King of Denmark uses his royal assets to alter people’s perception in a way to help him maintain the royal title. For instance, he sends for Hamlet’s childhood friends, Rosencrantz and Guildenstern to assist him into “gather[ing] / so much as from occasion [they] may glean, / Whether aught to [them] unknown afflicts [Hamlet]...” (II,ii,17-19). The example reveals Claudius’s obsession over Hamlet and takes sever action to find out what causes his madness as he fears Hamlet knows his secret. Claudius procures Rosencrantz and Guildenstern’s respect and loyalty with money to get them to betray and spy on Hamlet. Furthermore, Claudius uses his wealth for his own security since he mistrusts his subjects. He hires “Switzers” for his own protection (IV,v,95). He becomes paranoid and insecure because he believes the Danes will blame and rebel against him for every negative occurrences in Denmark ever since he has gained the royal position. Therefore, Claudius uses the powers he has usurped for himself to assert his supremacy position.
Please if the paragraph flows well, makes sense and if it analyzes why the use of wealth is significant in Claudius's part in Hamlet.
Your paragraph seems to be clear about how and why Claudius uses the king's fortune. Other comments are below.
Claudius uses the royal fortune for his own personal needs to satisfy himself. As King of Denmark, Claudius uses his royal assets to alter people’s perception in a way to help him maintain the royal title. For instance, he sends for Hamlet’s childhood friends, Rosencrantz and Guildenstern to assist him into<~~should be "in" not "into" “gather[ing] / so much as from occasion [they] may glean, / Whether aught to [them] unknown afflicts [Hamlet]...” (II,ii,17-19). The example reveals<~~delete first three words in this sentence Claudius’s obsession over<~~should be "with" not "over" Hamlet is clear, and he takes sever<~~sp? action to find out what causes his<~~whose? madness as hewho? fears Hamlet knows his secret. <~~(Need to clarify the pronouns in that sentence.) Claudius procures Rosencrantz and Guildenstern’s respect and loyalty with money<~~delete "with money" -- it's redundant, implied in "procures" to get them to spy on and betray Hamlet. Furthermore, Claudius uses his wealth for his own security since he mistrusts his subjects. He hires “Switzers” for his own protection (IV,v,95). He becomes paranoid and insecure because he believes the Danes will blame him and rebel against him for every negative occurrences in Denmark ever since he has gained the royal position. Therefore, Claudius uses the powers he has usurped for himself to assert his supremacy position<~~delete "position" -- it's redundant.
Thanks! And can you please edit the following a paragraph as well?:
Claudius uses poison as a tool of his evil scheme when he takes everything into his own hands directly or indirectly. Claudius’s jealousy drives him to commit fratricide and regicide. He has committed his "rank offence" by waiting until Old Hamlet sleeps in his orchard, so Claudius can pour the poison in Old Hamlet’s ear (I,v,60-68). No one suspects Old Hamlet is murdered since everyone thinks a snake’s venom killed him. Claudius’s murderous plan worked to gain what he desires which are the "crown" and the "queen". In addition, Claudius manipulates his subjects to do his ugly deeds, and he does not let anything or anyone stop him. For example, Claudius flatters Laertes with his superiority fencing skills. Claudius manipulates Laertes to avenge Polonius’s death on Hamlet with a poisoned sword. If the plan backfires, Claudius sets up a poisoned wine for Hamlet (IV,vii,160-164). When the plan is executed, Claudius does nothing to save Gertrude at his own expense, but says "Gertrude, do not drink" (V,ii,83). He has gone to the lengths to kill Hamlet by leading Laertes into a conniving plot, which also kills Gertrude, his wife. The King of Denmark has sacrificed humanity and humaneness in the acquisition of his goals. Thus, Claudius's ploy to use poison inflicts his family.
Claudius uses poison as a tool of his evil scheme when he takes everything into his own hands directly or indirectly<~~delete the last three words; "directly" is included in "takes ... own hands" and "indirectly" doesn't make sense!. Claudius’s jealousy drives him to commit fratricide and regicide. He has committed his "rank offence" by waiting until Old Hamlet sleeps in his orchard, so Claudius can pour the poison in Old Hamlet’s ear (I,v,60-68). No one suspects Old Hamlet is murdered since everyone thinks a snake’s venom killed him. Claudius’s murderous plan worked to gain what he desires: the crown and the queen. In addition, Claudius manipulates his subjects to do his ugly deeds, and he is relentless. For example, Claudius flatters Laertes with his superior fencing skills. Claudius manipulates Laertes to avenge Polonius’s death on Hamlet with a poisoned sword. If the plan backfires, Claudius sets up a poisoned wine for Hamlet (IV,vii,160-164). When the plan is executed, Claudius does nothing to save Gertrude at his own expense<~~delete these last 4 words; they don't make sense here, but says "Gertrude, do not drink" (V,ii,83). He has gone to great lengths to kill Hamlet by leading Laertes into a conniving plot, which also kills Gertrude, his wife. The King of Denmark has sacrificed his own humanity in the acquisition of his goals. Thus, Claudius's ploy to use poison inflicts his family.
And don't forget -- he ended up dying, too. Don't make it sound as if he arranged for all these people to be killed and he came out of it all OK.
The paragraph flows well and makes sense in analyzing Claudius's use of wealth in his role in Hamlet. It provides examples of how Claudius uses his royal fortune for personal needs and to manipulate others for his own benefit.
To determine if the paragraph is analyzing the significance of the use of wealth in Claudius's part in Hamlet, we can look at the evidence and explanations given. The paragraph states that Claudius uses his wealth to alter people's perception and maintain his royal title. This demonstrates the significance of wealth as a tool for manipulation and control.
The paragraph also mentions how Claudius uses his wealth to hire Rosencrantz and Guildenstern to spy on Hamlet. This further highlights the significance of wealth in Claudius's actions, as he uses it to gain the loyalty and betrayal of others.
Another point made in the paragraph is that Claudius uses his wealth for his own security, hiring "Switzers" for protection. This showcases the significance of wealth in maintaining power and protecting oneself from potential threats.
Overall, the paragraph effectively analyzes the significance of the use of wealth in Claudius's part in Hamlet by providing specific examples and explanations of how he utilizes his wealth for personal gain, manipulation, and security.