A question of faulty parallelism

1)) Activities on Wednesday afternoons include fishing trips, dance lessons, and computers.
2)) Hannah told her rock climbing partner that she bought a new harness and of her desire to climb Otter Cliffs.

Did you read through the webpage at the link I sent you before? Ones similar to these are in there.

The problem in the first one is in the series.

The problem in the second one is after the word "that."

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To identify and correct faulty parallelism, we need to ensure that all the items in a series are parallel in structure. Parallelism means that the elements being compared or listed are grammatically consistent. In other words, they should have the same grammatical form.

Let's address each sentence separately:

1) "Activities on Wednesday afternoons include fishing trips, dance lessons, and computers."

In this sentence, the problem lies in the parallel structure. Fishing trips and dance lessons are both nouns, but "computers" is used as an object instead of a noun. To correct the faulty parallelism, we can change it to: "Activities on Wednesday afternoons include fishing trips, dance lessons, and computer activities." Now all three elements are parallel and consistent in structure.

2) "Hannah told her rock climbing partner that she bought a new harness and of her desire to climb Otter Cliffs."

In this sentence, the issue is with parallel structure after the word "that." "She bought a new harness" is a complete clause, while "of her desire to climb Otter Cliffs" is a prepositional phrase. To fix this, we can rephrase it to: "Hannah told her rock climbing partner that she bought a new harness and expressed her desire to climb Otter Cliffs." Both parts now have parallel structure as they are both clauses.

In summary, to identify and correct faulty parallelism, we need to ensure that all elements in a series or comparison are grammatically consistent. By making the elements parallel in structure, we can ensure clearer and more effective communication.