Does the following commas need to be where they are? Thanks for your help!
I was recently informed by my professor,(teacher's name here), about a job opportunity in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs, that might be available in your school district.
The first two commas are fine; the third one is not needed.
The sentence is awkward, though -- repetition of the "in" prepositional phrases:
in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs
and
in your school district
One of them needs to go; perhaps they can be combined in some smooth way.
=)
The first two commas in the sentence are used correctly to set off the appositive phrase "(teacher's name here)". This provides additional information about the professor.
However, the third comma after "programs" is not necessary and should be removed.
Regarding the structure of the sentence, there is some repetition with the prepositional phrases "in your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs" and "in your school district." To make the sentence more concise and avoid redundancy, you can combine these phrases smoothly.
Here's a revised version of the sentence without the extra comma and with the combined prepositional phrases:
"I was recently informed by my professor, (teacher's name here), about a job opportunity that might be available in either your Head Start or Michigan School Readiness programs, located in your school district."
By revising the sentence this way, you maintain clarity while making it more concise and eliminating unnecessary repetition.