Hello. Below is a sentence in my essay for school:
Lolling in lounge and other chairs gathered around the pool, alleviating water slides down the throats of loving relations.
I was curious if this was written correctly because 'alleviating water' comes after the comma when the phrase before the comma is talking about the 'loving relations.' I seem to think it is not, but I am not positive that is so.
Please, did I write my sentence incorrectly or is my memory simply playing tricks on me?
I am wondering why water is in lounge and other chairs, unless it rained.
So it is incorrect, as I thought?
"Lolling in lounge and other chairs gathered around the pool, alleviating water slides down the throats of loving relations."
This really doesn't make good sense. Grammatically, it seems complete, but I really have no idea what you are trying to say.
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alleviating is used as an adjective (perhaps that is where some of the confusion comes in???)
Aleviating water slides down the throats of loving relations lolling in lounge and other chairs around the pool.
The other way the water was lolling in the chairs and then sliding down throats alleviatingly. Yuck
It seems like there might be some confusion and errors in the sentence you provided. Let's break it down and see if we can identify the issues.
The original sentence is: "Lolling in lounge and other chairs gathered around the pool, alleviating water slides down the throats of loving relations."
Based on the context, it seems that you are trying to describe a scene where people are sitting in chairs around a pool, and water is somehow being consumed. However, the sentence is not clear and could be interpreted in different ways. This confusion might be due to the placement and use of certain words.
Here is a suggested revision to clarify the meaning of the sentence: "While lolling in lounge and other chairs gathered around the pool, loving relations are served water to alleviate their thirst."
By rephrasing the sentence, we have made it clearer that the water is being served to the loving relations, rather than being lolling in the chairs or sliding down their throats.
Remember that when writing, it's important to ensure that your sentences are clear, concise, and convey your intended meaning to the reader.