Grammar - Improving Tone
posted by Euridice .
Revise this paragraph to eliminate negative attitude and focus on postive ideas.
"We are sorry to inform you that the Travel-Lite suitcase, Model X4457, you asked about is temporarily out of stock in our warehouse, just as Ms. Cummings of our Hilldale store infromed you. We anticipate getting some in by next month and having them available at the Hilldale store, if you can wait that long. Just check back with them in six weeks or so."
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We are sorry to inform you that the travel-lite suitcase you asked about it is temporarily out of stock in our warehouse, just as Ms. Cummings imformed you.