Does this make sense?
If not fix it please.
If so add on to make it better.
Thank-You
Intro:
You can fool some of the people all of the time, and all of the people some of the time, but you can not fool all of the people all of the time. Therefore, the only reason for time is so that everything doesn't happen at once. “And thus the whirligig of time brings in his revenges.” With time, the truth will come out. So, is this true?
P.S Realting to Twelfth Night
The first thing I suggest is that you give credit for the quotation that is your first sentence. It needs to be in quotation marks and then name Abraham Lincoln as the originator of that statement. http://www.quoteland.com/search.asp?query=you+can+fool+some+of+the+people
Also you need to delete that comma after "So" in your last sentence (question).
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Yes, it makes sense overall. However, there are a few improvements you can make:
1. Give credit for the quotation: Start by putting the quotation in quotation marks and then mention that it is a statement by Abraham Lincoln. This will acknowledge the source and avoid any potential plagiarism. For example, you can write: "You can fool some of the people all of the time, and all of the people some of the time, but you can not fool all of the people all of the time." - Abraham Lincoln.
2. Clarify the relevance to Twelfth Night: In your P.S., you mention that this is related to Twelfth Night. You can elaborate on how the quote or the theme of truth and deception connects to the play. This will provide context for the reader and make your writing more interesting.
3. Grammatical correction: Remove the unnecessary comma after "So" in your last sentence. This will make the sentence grammatically correct.
So, revise your introduction to include these suggestions:
Intro:
"You can fool some of the people all of the time, and all of the people some of the time, but you can not fool all of the people all of the time." - Abraham Lincoln. Therefore, the only reason for time is so that everything doesn't happen at once. “And thus the whirligig of time brings in his revenges.” With time, the truth will come out. So, is this true?
P.S.: This quote and the exploration of truth and deception relate to the themes present in William Shakespeare's play, Twelfth Night.
I hope these suggestions help to improve your writing! Let me know if you have any other questions or need further assistance.