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english1A - Does my thesis sound better?
THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 7:32pm by Kuromi

English1A
Your thesis would be much better if you didn't preach and tell your reader what they "must" or "should" do. I'm sure you can make a convincing thesis about how all people are human with strenghts and weaknesses, regardless of their ethnic background.
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Ms. Sue

English1A - Does my thesis sound better?
"Individuals not only need to realize the true meaning of success, but must also know that with enough determination and motivation, and with the right attitude, the American Dream can become a reality." This is a GOOD thesis statement. Congrats!
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 7:32pm by Writeacher

english1A - still working on my thesis
oh i actually changed my thesis. If society would realize the true meaning of success and take advantage of opportunities available to them, they would know that with enough determination and the right attitude, the American Dream can become a reality. think it kinda sounds ...
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by Kuromi

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
Get your thesis statement straightened out first. Then we can deal with the rest of the paper.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by Writeacher

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
Your thesis statement is too wordy. Are you trying to argue that Americans do not realize that the "American Dream" is the possibility, not the guarantee, to achieve by determination and hard work.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by GuruBlue

english1A - still working on my thesis
You need to check the "grammar" in your statement. Yes, I think we are on the same track. Can you now outline support for your thesis? You need to be sure that your thesis and the supporting paragraphs are on the same track.
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by GuruBlue

english1A- need help with my thesis
I'd narrow it down to this thesis: Women were the first crossdressers. Please refer back to my post about women wearing pants.
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 8:23pm by Ms. Sue

Thesis Statement
What is an effective way to start a thesis statement without using, I think... I think the world is a better place. The world is a better place. Is the world a better place? No better place could the world be. Shakespeare could have not found a better place. enough? Could you ...
Sunday, October 8, 2006 at 1:58pm by Gina

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
yes that is my argument. that the american dream is possible.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by Kuromi

English1A
Can you support your thesis with three good solid arguments?
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Ms. Sue

english1a - topic/thesis
I'm not really sure how you'll tie in your idea of what you want to write about with the questions.
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 2:04am by MattsRiceBowl

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
so what this means is that I need more evidence to support my thesis?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Kuromi

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I agree with Writeacher. Also -- what is your thesis statement, Kuromi?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Ms. Sue

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
This looks good. Now you need to support your thesis sentence.
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 6:13pm by Ms. Sue

English1a- my thesis, is it better?
You wrote: "As the rich is getting richer, society not only needs to realize the true meaning of success, but should also take advantage of opportunities that is available to them so that American can continue to be a richer and stronger country." I think this is worse than ...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Writeacher

English1A
Hmm i thought if it is an "argumentative" essay then it would okay to say that. My professor has not said anything about my last 3 essays. I got A's on all of them. Is this thesis any better? As the United States continue to evolve becoming the "melting pot" of the world, ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Kuromi

english1a- my thesis, is it better?
See my post above if you haven't already found it: http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1254267756
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Writeacher

english1A- Need help with my argument/thesis
You may be able to post the rest of your introduction now -- after "Gender Myths." You may also need to type it here.
Friday, October 2, 2009 at 9:52pm by Ms. Sue

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I think your thesis is too broad: how people dress ....does not define sexual orienation.. Why dont you focus on a subgroup? Anytime you try to explain "people" you are going to suffer from making generalizations. If you focused on Goths or religious cults (the long hair, or ...
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by bobpursley

english1A- Need help with my argument/thesis
darn that is so weird that it doesn't post darn it! I'll post a new question.
Friday, October 2, 2009 at 9:52pm by Kuromi

Creative Writing
Writeacher's remarks are pretty blunt. Let me take some of the edge off: She is saying, you dont have a thesis (thesis=clear path for the essay to the conclusion) yet you already wrote the outline for the body paragraphs? Hmmm. This is akin to building the foundation of house...
Monday, December 7, 2009 at 1:51pm by bobpursley

English1A-need help with thesis
You wrote: "While some are struggling to survive in this world today, Americans should appreciate what they have and realize the benefits this country has to offer them; that with hard work, determination, and a good education, anyone can succeed with the right attitude." That...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Writeacher

english1A- need help with my thesis
Ok I think I was going the wrong way with my Gender topic. I think I should write about how times have changed and society evolved, women and men do not perform their traditional roles as they use to and do not dress the same as they use to. And women go to school now, work, ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 8:23pm by Kuromi

English1A-need help with thesis
More sites here: http://www.google.com/search?q=strong+thesis+statement&ie=utf-8&oe=utf-8&aq=t&rlz=1R1GGGL_en___US321&client=firefox-a
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Writeacher

English1A - need help on argument/thesis
http://www.well.com/user/queerjhd/sxonthefoolishness.htm Think about those issues. Lastly, are you homophobic? What importance does it matter if folks are judged to be homosexuals by appearance? I would focus your thesis on the effect of appearance on cultural centrism...how ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 4:35pm by bobpursley

english1A - still working on my thesis
Individuals not only need to realize the real meaning of success , but also must realize that determination and hard work are essential to make the attainment of the American Dream possible. See how this fits your idea.
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by GuruBlue

English1A
I'm still having a bit of trouble with my introduction and thesis. This is what I have, I hope it's any better. Greetings and Gestures All culture groups have various ways of communicating with each other whether it is through speaking, sign language, or body movement. ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Kuromi

Literature Essay (Writeacher)
I could tell better if I could read your thesis statement, but so far I think this paragraph reads really well now! Nice!! In organizing your paper, the thesis statement's best position is at the end of your introduction ... and that paragraph eventually will precede this ...
Thursday, January 9, 2014 at 8:36pm by Writeacher

College English
It's a response paper to Hoagland's City Rat. I don't have a thesis or outline. I'm better at writing up a paper and then putting in a thesis and organizing it. I'm not even sure how well I understand the story, so if there are things that I didn't get, can you please let me ...
Monday, November 8, 2010 at 3:20pm by Anonymous

Can someone please give me feedback on my SAT essa
I think it would have been better if you looked deeper. You discussed points of view, but never addressed the fallacy of the fool proof plan. Your writing is wordy. Your statement on Alena.." I would always debate issues...because we had different points of views". Hmmm.This ...
Monday, February 16, 2009 at 10:24am by bobpursley

english1a- my thesis, is it better?
I re did my thesis.. Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Kuromi

English
Here's a possibility for a thesis. Jeannette's father was a better parent than her mother because he made his child feel special. The body of your essay should show examples to prove your thesis. After you've written the body of your essay, then write the introduction.
Wednesday, April 25, 2012 at 10:33pm by Ms. Sue

Enligsh
My teacher told me how to revise my thesis in terms of parallelism. I am not sure what she means or how to do it. This is my thesis: "School uniforms should be required in all public schools because not only do they cut down on the teasing and bullying but they also help ...
Tuesday, October 5, 2010 at 4:43pm by Kayla

English1A
Much MUCH better!! Now one last thing -- make sure all those instances of "it" are clarified. "...by knowing what to do, as some people might take it offensively or take it personally for disrespecting them even though it was good intentions." ??
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Writeacher

English1a - topic/thesis
Matt is right. It's hard to see where you intend to go with such a vague thought. You should probably brainstorm many ideas, such as men's traditional roles now taken on by women and vice versa, and then list them here if you want someone's input into your thinking. At this ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 2:04am by Writeacher

English
What is your thesis? My thesis is The obesity prevention programs and their guidelines that inspire health centers, and weight centers to concentrate on the physically, mentally and social part of the whole child. How do you plan to support this thesis? Suggest ways to avoid ...
Monday, September 15, 2008 at 11:42am by Gwen

Thesis statement
How do I write a thesis statement about why I choose Medical Billing and Coding as a career. I have read what a thesis statement is, but my writing is terrible and I just can't get the understanding of what to include in my thesis statement
Thursday, February 18, 2010 at 10:47am by Fannie

english
Okay this is my Thesis:The Internet is better in terms of providing access journals, special collections and it is quicker when searching informations than Library.While in library resources can't be checked our or be available. Is my thesis good? And the four examples I have ...
Sunday, November 14, 2010 at 8:53pm by Lisa

english
I have to wrtie a paragraph in which I make claim, state thesis, can not use "For instance or for example and support with 4 examples.I choose this prompt "The internet is a much better resource for students than a library" Please tell me how to start this without using "for ...
Sunday, November 14, 2010 at 8:53pm by Lisa

Writing
I like the second one better. Either in your thesis statement or in your support, you should clarify "social society" as it applies to shoplifting. A better wording might be -- "The influence of our affluent society contributes to shoplifting."
Monday, June 30, 2008 at 7:11pm by Ms. Sue

English
Sorry* Is this a better thesis ?
Monday, April 12, 2010 at 7:22pm by Tharima

thesis!
#1 is better. #2 is too wishy-washy.
Thursday, September 6, 2012 at 5:01pm by Writeacher

english
Can somebody help me restate my thesis please. statement for the conclusion. My thesis is: An analysis of the literary devices in Katy Perry " Fireworks" and Miley Cyrus " The Climb" reveals Miley Cyrus creates a better argument for how every person is an exclusive individual ...
Thursday, November 3, 2011 at 11:47am by jane

English
"There are many high school students who are unccessful in their school performances due to not getting much adivce of how to better their learning skills." This is not a thesis statement. It is factual, but YOUR OPINION about this topic is not stated...
Tuesday, November 30, 2010 at 7:50pm by Writeacher

English 12
Please use correct grammar, punctuation, capitalization, spelling, etc., for us to be able to understand what you are asking and what you have written. Please help us help you. Question: How have you phrased your topic into a thesis statement? Once we know that, we can help ...
Saturday, November 20, 2010 at 9:16pm by Writeacher

English (essay help)
I have to write a essay about the confederation of Canada in 1867 and why it was a good choice. I have all of my body paragraphs done but I'm having trouble thinking of a proper introduction. My first sentence for my intro is: confederation was the best choice for the British ...
Sunday, April 6, 2014 at 1:40pm by Anonymous

Biology Research Paper
We find it mixed in our food on the shelves in the supermarket and growing in a plot down the lane. It is variously known as genetic engineering, which is a technology in which the genome of a living cell is modified for medical or industrial use. It’s used in our everyday ...
Tuesday, April 27, 2010 at 7:11pm by mysterychicken

English
I like your thesis better. I'll use that one. Thank you!
Sunday, March 25, 2012 at 7:11pm by Rebecca

U.S. History
Concentrate on making this sentence better: But many questioned whether America should view these three men as Captains of Industry or Robber Barons. (Who are "many"?) Your thesis statement must include factual information plus your position/opinion/stance. Without your ...
Friday, October 18, 2013 at 10:36am by Writeacher

english
I'm putting the finishing touches on my final draft of my essay. In my conclusion we have to restate are thesis in different words. My thesis in my introduction was Therapeutic cloning is better than reproductive cloning because of the great ethics, effective techniques, and ...
Sunday, March 8, 2009 at 9:25pm by Michele

English1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
PS -- I think your premise is off. You wrote, "I want my paper to be about how over the years society has changed a great deal as gender roles, gender identity, how people dress and what not." I don't believe this is true. Too many young people in today's society think all ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Writeacher

TO MS SUE Essay help
I have to write a essay about the confederation of Canada in 1867 and why it was a good choice. I have all of my body paragraphs done but I'm having trouble thinking of a proper introduction. My first sentence for my intro is: confederation was the best choice for the British ...
Sunday, April 6, 2014 at 6:49pm by Anonymous

Thesis statements??
Scratch that. I think the better one would be D.
Friday, February 1, 2013 at 5:57pm by Ashley J.

bible paper help on thesis (HS)
Your thesis looks good. Check this site for more information about thesis statements for expository papers. (Broken Link Removed)
Thursday, June 11, 2009 at 7:01pm by Ms. Sue

concude refuting paragraph
i dont know what to do on this one. my teacher told that i need to get the readers attention again back to my thesis which is girls are better friends than men. here's the paragraph. However, some people think that men are better in handling friendships. Even though men are ...
Wednesday, July 13, 2011 at 2:15pm by won sho han

Social Studies(Thesis)
I read all about thesis and i made my thesis about child labor At what age is it appropriate for a child to have a job and a child should have a right to freedom. That is my thesis is it correct yes or no THANKS
Tuesday, April 26, 2011 at 2:27pm by macy

English
That's not what a thesis statement is supposed to do, but if those are the directions from your teacher ... What I'd do is keep the thesis the same (with the punctuation corrections), and then write the paper so that you support one side more than the other. Then in your ...
Tuesday, May 20, 2008 at 11:58pm by Writeacher

English/writing
what is a catchy topic for my essay based on this thesis statement? In Nathaniel Hawthorne's, The Scarlet Letter, it suggests that one must find their own internal strength and strive for individual redemption by applying the beliefs of transcendentalism and individualism to ...
Wednesday, March 27, 2013 at 6:04pm by Sally

english - What is true love
thanks very much ms. sue :) after i done writing essay you please able to edit it? and i not know what to write for thesis statement. i get help from school friend who know english and he help me come up with this but how i make it better? Love not just come with emotions, it ...
Thursday, February 9, 2012 at 10:49pm by Mohammad

English1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
I think you need to find a different topic. This is just too emotionally charged, IMO, for any student to write about -- it's too subjective (and almost ephemeral). You'll be trying to argue points that simply cannot be made. Or you'll be writing such generalities that it will...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Writeacher

Thesis statements??
B would work if the "I think" wording were not there. There's a better one. Do you see it?
Friday, February 1, 2013 at 5:57pm by Writeacher

com . 150
(The word "alcoholism" does not have a capital A.) It's an OK thesis statement, but not very catchy. Read the poor and redone thesis statements here and see how you can make yours better: http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
Thursday, October 22, 2009 at 2:58pm by Writeacher

English1A
Okay my professor approved of the second thesis, now I just need 3 solid arguments to support my thesis. I thought I would support it by discussing what is and the differences of racism, stereotyping, prejudice in my first paragraph. Second paragraph maybe discussing how ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Kuromi

English
That's a good thesis statement. Perhaps a better word for opinions is delusions.
Tuesday, April 3, 2012 at 9:55pm by Ms. Sue

English Ms. Sue
I have been researching the difference between these two all day. It's for my argumentive essay. After reading them I think that theraputic cloning is better. So would my thesis be something like Theraputic cloing is better then reproductive cloning because of religious ...
Saturday, February 28, 2009 at 10:19pm by Michele

History
Can you rewrite that without the "I am going to..." Thesis statements state what you are intending to prove, or demonstrate. Thesis statements: Chocolate candy is the best breakfast to send a child to school on. Halloween is the devil's playground, and should be abolished. ...
Wednesday, March 3, 2010 at 2:35pm by bobpursley

english
I did help with my thesis statement? I writing an essay from the play trifles by susan Glaspell. Thesis: Minnie Wright loses her mind which relates to isolation,the gender differneces and the canary death. I need a very strong thesis
Wednesday, September 15, 2010 at 3:36pm by terri

renting an apartment better option than buying a h
What would be a good thesis statement for renting an apartment is a better option than buying a house
Saturday, January 8, 2011 at 3:28pm by Anonymous

English
I need a 450 word thesis about why buying a house is better than renting an apartment?
Saturday, October 30, 2010 at 11:36pm by randy

com 156
need help with writing a thesis statement on renting an apartment is better than buying a house.
Tuesday, July 19, 2011 at 10:42pm by Jane

english 114
can anyone please help me? I am having to write an essay on Protecting Freedom of Expression by Derek Bok ,I have come up with a thesis but my teacher says no can some one help me with a arguemental thesis. new thesis how does this sound? Thesis: Using confederate flags and ...
Tuesday, January 31, 2012 at 9:25am by sharon

English
NOT A THESIS: Teen Pregnancy Prevention does help stop a lot of the teen birth rates, and consequences. Please read the links above and my directions for writing a thesis. This is a statement of fact. It is not a thesis.
Sunday, February 6, 2011 at 6:07pm by Writeacher

renting an apartment better option than buying a h
Agood thesis statement for renting an apartment is a better option than buying a house
Saturday, January 8, 2011 at 3:28pm by Keona

English
Sorry, I meant "that my thesis is able to be supported and argued for." I'm trying to establish the fact that the food culture in the eastern hempisphere is being westernized as a result of globalization... Is the previous statement itself another thesis or am I just restating...
Thursday, November 21, 2013 at 10:50am by Peytreshia

english
I need a thesis statement of 450 words for why renting a house is a better option than buying a homr
Sunday, May 29, 2011 at 7:14pm by Amie

English
By examining how Gatsby has logic,ideals, and a dream, it is evident that he is a heroic figure. Would this be a better thesis?
Sunday, March 25, 2012 at 7:11pm by Rebecca

english1A - still working on my thesis
I have a couple. If society would realize the true meaning of success and take advantage of opportunities available to them, they would know that with enough determination and motivation, dreams are definitely possible. Society not only needs to realize the true meaning of ...
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by Kuromi

world history
Need Thesis help for essay on....this is the question being answered: Prompt: Hinduism, Confucianism and Buddhism are three of the world’s great belief systems. Compare and contrast their impact on the societies that embraced them. I started this thesis, but am trying to make ...
Tuesday, November 29, 2011 at 6:53am by Fort

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
Although I just skimmed this version, I liked the other one better. You started preaching again saying that people SHOULD. If you're happy with this version, then by all means, turn it in. Writing is a private enterprise and only the author knows what s/he wants to say. You ...
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 6:25pm by Ms. Sue

English1A
Thanks!
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Kuromi

English Comp.
That's all fact, no opinion - therefore, not a thesis statement. Go back to the last one you posted. It's better than this.
Wednesday, February 2, 2011 at 11:24am by Writeacher

Amer Lit
That is a lot better:) so can that act as my thesis? even though it is spread out over a few sentences? thanks
Saturday, March 5, 2011 at 2:47pm by Hans

English 10
Please post your thesis statement and your outline of your essay. We'll be much better able then to help you with the introduction.
Wednesday, August 28, 2013 at 4:27pm by Ms. Sue

Research Writing
My topic is on Abortion and I am supposed to come up with a thesis statement. Create a thesis statement for your research paper. Abortion is one of the most controversial moral issues of our age. Although pro-choice and pro-life arguments centering on the morality of the issue...
Wednesday, January 14, 2009 at 11:04pm by Marleen

AP world history
1. Thesis 2. Body paragraph #1 - Body 1 doc. A POV [Point Of View- usually from the author’s] - Commentary (ties back to thesis) - Body 1 doc. B POV - Commentary (ties back to thesis) - Body 1 doc. C POV - Commentary (ties back to thesis) 3. Body paragraph #2 - Body 2 doc. A ...
Saturday, February 20, 2010 at 4:43pm by APWorl

AP world history
1. Thesis 2. Body paragraph #1 - Body 1 doc. A POV [Point Of View- usually from the author’s] - Commentary (ties back to thesis) - Body 1 doc. B POV - Commentary (ties back to thesis) - Body 1 doc. C POV - Commentary (ties back to thesis) 3. Body paragraph #2 - Body 2 doc. A ...
Saturday, February 20, 2010 at 4:43pm by APworldOUCH

English writing
Can a thesis statement have the word BECAUSE? For example, Cats make better housepets because they are friendly, clean, and trained.
Monday, June 30, 2008 at 12:04pm by Ingle

Social Studies(my Thesis Check this please)
That's three sentences. A thesis statement is only one sentence. You've asked a question -- which is not acceptable in a thesis statement. You haven't given your opinion. Read the sites I posted for you and follow those instructions.
Thursday, April 21, 2011 at 5:02pm by Ms. Sue

English
Explain,in your own words, why the following sentence is a thesis statement, a story, or a topic. Computers allow students to learn better.
Tuesday, January 22, 2013 at 6:40pm by Ryan

English1A
hmmm okay, I get it now. Thank you!
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Kuromi

English Ms. Sue
I understand. That's why i said before that my argumentive edge is going to argue why therapeutic cloning is better than reproductive. Isn't that what I was stating before in my thesis. I'm confused because we have to argue against two things. I need three reasons that I'm ...
Saturday, February 28, 2009 at 10:19pm by Michele

Thesis statements??
I would assume the "better one" would be C?
Friday, February 1, 2013 at 5:57pm by Ashley J.

English
The first thing you need to do is develop a thesis statement reflecting you opinion on this subject. Then outline three major arguments that support your thesis. Your introductory paragraph should briefly introduce your arguments and include your thesis statement. The next ...
Sunday, March 30, 2008 at 5:50pm by Ms. Sue

English
I writing a compare/contrast essay on movie i watched that be smke signals. i got my thematic statement done, and i have to do thesis now, this is what teacher say Thesis: introduce the story and tag it. I not get how to start thesis? do i say In the story....
Wednesday, September 26, 2012 at 8:01pm by Mohammad

speech
ok im still confused about the thesis tho my thesis was Without getting in trouble, life would be more fun. Then we have to do a Division of Labor (DOL), A, support your thesis B. Major division fo top key words, spoken in sentences
Tuesday, March 31, 2009 at 11:27pm by jerson

english thesis
I am not sure if my my original post, posted? lol o Age, understanding the concept of death, and the changes in family structure all depict the type of grieving a child will experience after to the death of a sibling. that is my thesis, but I want to know if anybody has ...
Monday, December 12, 2011 at 8:59pm by Dawn

writing thesis
So, thanks for the help to those who answered my last question. My book is Murder on The Orient Express by Agatha Christie, and I need a thesis for it. In the book, a man is murdered by a grieving family, because he killed their daughter. I want to do my research paper on how ...
Thursday, September 6, 2012 at 10:47am by Chelsea

english
okay is this a better thesis? Minnie Wright’s insanity relates to isolation, unhappy marriage and the gender difference all causes her to the murder of her husband.
Wednesday, September 15, 2010 at 3:36pm by terri

english
okay is this a better thesis? Minnie Wright’s insanity relates to isolation, unhappy marriage and the gender difference all causes her to the murder of her husband.
Wednesday, September 15, 2010 at 3:54pm by terri

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