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English1A
Thanks!
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Kuromi

English1A
hmmm okay, I get it now. Thank you!
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Kuromi

english1A - Does my thesis sound better?
THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 7:32pm by Kuromi

English1A - Critical Thinking and Writing
THANK YOU!!
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 9:45pm by Kuromi

English1A
I'll look this over and respond in the morning.
Friday, October 30, 2009 at 5:44pm by Writeacher

English1A
Can you support your thesis with three good solid arguments?
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Ms. Sue

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
yes that is my argument. that the american dream is possible.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by Kuromi

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
Sorry I forgot to put my name up there.
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 6:25pm by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Writeacher, I responded to the last post with more to proofread, Thank you.
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 4:58pm by Kuromi

English1A
If your essay is in a Word document, try copying just the text with no bullets or numbering.
Monday, September 28, 2009 at 5:55pm by Ms. Sue

english1a - topic/thesis
I'm not really sure how you'll tie in your idea of what you want to write about with the questions.
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 2:04am by MattsRiceBowl

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I agree with Writeacher. Also -- what is your thesis statement, Kuromi?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Ms. Sue

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
so what this means is that I need more evidence to support my thesis?
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
I put a post earlier last nite. Did everyone miss it? :(
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 3:07pm by Kuromi

English1A-previous post
Thanks you@! That is actually someone like me, Asian but born as an American. I could definitely relate!
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 11:17pm by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
This looks good. Now you need to support your thesis sentence.
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 6:13pm by Ms. Sue

English1A
Sorry -- this is awkward phrasing: or as a sign of disrespect Those words should just be deleted.
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Writeacher

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I actually think tattoos could be added also, as they are a part of fashion, and come and go.
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by bobpursley

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Yes, I will be discussing how Disney portray female and male characters in their movies. I will work on the revisions right now and get back to you. Thank you!
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 3:07pm by Kuromi

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
Get your thesis statement straightened out first. Then we can deal with the rest of the paper.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by Writeacher

English1A-previous post
I'm in the Eastern Time Zone, so I didn't see your last post until this morning. Your arguments look good.
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 11:17pm by Ms. Sue

english1A - response to last post
Ms Sue, You did not read the previous posts, I did post my assignments. On Thursday October 1, 2009 at 2:04am.
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 8:03pm by Kuromi

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I agree with both. I am amazed at the generalities, just about every past tense verb is followed by a sweeping generality, usually untrue.
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by bobpursley

english1A- Need help with my argument/thesis
You may be able to post the rest of your introduction now -- after "Gender Myths." You may also need to type it here.
Friday, October 2, 2009 at 9:52pm by Ms. Sue

English1A - Critical Thinking and Writing
I said that part wrong. I didn't mean born with the preconceived notion, I think meant children are raised with these beliefs, not born with it. My mistake.
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 9:45pm by Kuromi

english1A- need help with thesis and to proofread
Your thesis statement is too wordy. Are you trying to argue that Americans do not realize that the "American Dream" is the possibility, not the guarantee, to achieve by determination and hard work.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 5:04pm by GuruBlue

English1A-previous post
I responded to my previous post. Can someone help me, I'm not sure what time it is where everyone is at. I am in California but sll the posts is 3 hours ahead of me.
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 11:17pm by Kuromi

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
Ok well its due today I don't have time to do a whole different essay. Thanks guys, I will let you know my grade for it on Monday. So far I got an A for the last two essays that you folks helped me with. Appreciate it!!
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Kuromi

english1A- Need help with my argument/thesis
darn that is so weird that it doesn't post darn it! I'll post a new question.
Friday, October 2, 2009 at 9:52pm by Kuromi

english1A- need help with my thesis
I'd narrow it down to this thesis: Women were the first crossdressers. Please refer back to my post about women wearing pants.
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 8:23pm by Ms. Sue

English1A
Your thesis would be much better if you didn't preach and tell your reader what they "must" or "should" do. I'm sure you can make a convincing thesis about how all people are human with strenghts and weaknesses, regardless of their ethnic background.
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Ms. Sue

english1A - response to last post
Of course you're allowed on this site. However, you probably would have gotten a more useful response if you had posted your assignment and its background in your first post.
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 8:03pm by Ms. Sue

English1A
Thank you Bob, I did have an example like that but was told to take it out. If you read the original you will see that I had included everything you said but maybe I included more than I should have. But yes I will do that.
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
When you post again, be sure to post in a new message so your message doesn't get lost farther down the website. Writeacher gave you a review on the old thread. thanks.
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 4:58pm by bobpursley

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
Tattoos, well I'm referring to "genders" I didn't research the history behind it, if it were only done for men, if so than I can definitely add tattoos in there saying that men use to get them but now more women are getting them too.
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Kuromi

english1A - still working on my thesis
Individuals not only need to realize the real meaning of success , but also must realize that determination and hard work are essential to make the attainment of the American Dream possible. See how this fits your idea.
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by GuruBlue

English1A - Does my thesis sound better?
"Individuals not only need to realize the true meaning of success, but must also know that with enough determination and motivation, and with the right attitude, the American Dream can become a reality." This is a GOOD thesis statement. Congrats!
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 7:32pm by Writeacher

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
You might make the argument that the change in women's roles is reflected in the difference between earlier Disney movies and the movies being made today. Use examples such as Cinderella and Snow While, etc. and Mulan
Tuesday, November 10, 2009 at 1:11am by GuruBlue

English1A
Much MUCH better!! Now one last thing -- make sure all those instances of "it" are clarified. "...by knowing what to do, as some people might take it offensively or take it personally for disrespecting them even though it was good intentions." ??
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Writeacher

english1A - response to last post
I did post my assignment in my first response
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 8:03pm by Kuromi

English1A
Can I say: Because first impression is most important when first meeting someone, it is imperative be able to handle situations correctly by knowing what to do, as some people might take it offensively or take it personally by disrespecting them with a hug, even though it was ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Kuromi

English1A
"if an American was greeted" should be if an American were greeted>/i> Otherwise, it sounds fine! =)
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Writeacher

english1A - still working on my thesis
oh i actually changed my thesis. If society would realize the true meaning of success and take advantage of opportunities available to them, they would know that with enough determination and the right attitude, the American Dream can become a reality. think it kinda sounds ...
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by Kuromi

english1A - still working on my thesis
You need to check the "grammar" in your statement. Yes, I think we are on the same track. Can you now outline support for your thesis? You need to be sure that your thesis and the supporting paragraphs are on the same track.
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by GuruBlue

English1A-previous post
If you haven't already thought of this -- you might mention the large numbers of foreign, especially Asian, children that have been adopted by Americans of European ancestry. Although my 14-year-old friend is Asian by birth, he has been raised as an American since he was 6 ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 11:17pm by Ms. Sue

english1A - argument/these
I think it is too broad. To accept others for who they are, not judge them. I'm not sure if I want my argument to be on letting individuals be who they want to be as far as genders, and not judging them and accepting them. Or not judging by someone's appearance and mistaking ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 4:37am by Kuromi

English1A
Because first impressions are most important when first<~~delete that word; it's repetitive meeting someone, it is imperative be able to handle situations correctly by knowing what to do. A person from Japan, for example, might take offense or as a sign of disrespect if he ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Writeacher

English1a - topic/thesis
Matt is right. It's hard to see where you intend to go with such a vague thought. You should probably brainstorm many ideas, such as men's traditional roles now taken on by women and vice versa, and then list them here if you want someone's input into your thinking. At this ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 2:04am by Writeacher

English1a- my thesis, is it better?
You wrote: "As the rich is getting richer, society not only needs to realize the true meaning of success, but should also take advantage of opportunities that is available to them so that American can continue to be a richer and stronger country." I think this is worse than ...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Writeacher

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
Although I just skimmed this version, I liked the other one better. You started preaching again saying that people SHOULD. If you're happy with this version, then by all means, turn it in. Writing is a private enterprise and only the author knows what s/he wants to say. You ...
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 6:25pm by Ms. Sue

English1A
Hmm i thought if it is an "argumentative" essay then it would okay to say that. My professor has not said anything about my last 3 essays. I got A's on all of them. Is this thesis any better? As the United States continue to evolve becoming the "melting pot" of the world, ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Kuromi

English1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
PS -- I think your premise is off. You wrote, "I want my paper to be about how over the years society has changed a great deal as gender roles, gender identity, how people dress and what not." I don't believe this is true. Too many young people in today's society think all ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Writeacher

English1A
http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1256602932 Did you follow directions from this post? Make sure you do. I'm still seeing far too much repetition in what you posted above.
Friday, October 30, 2009 at 5:25am by Writeacher

english1a- my thesis, is it better?
See my post above if you haven't already found it: http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1254267756
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Writeacher

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1258249374 the link is for those who missed it.
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 3:07pm by bobpursley

English1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
I think you need to find a different topic. This is just too emotionally charged, IMO, for any student to write about -- it's too subjective (and almost ephemeral). You'll be trying to argue points that simply cannot be made. Or you'll be writing such generalities that it will...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Writeacher

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1258315637
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 4:58pm by bobpursley

english1A - still working on my thesis
I have a couple. If society would realize the true meaning of success and take advantage of opportunities available to them, they would know that with enough determination and motivation, dreams are definitely possible. Society not only needs to realize the true meaning of ...
Wednesday, September 30, 2009 at 4:28pm by Kuromi

english1A- need help with my thesis
Ok I think I was going the wrong way with my Gender topic. I think I should write about how times have changed and society evolved, women and men do not perform their traditional roles as they use to and do not dress the same as they use to. And women go to school now, work, ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 8:23pm by Kuromi

English1A - need help on argument/thesis
http://www.well.com/user/queerjhd/sxonthefoolishness.htm Think about those issues. Lastly, are you homophobic? What importance does it matter if folks are judged to be homosexuals by appearance? I would focus your thesis on the effect of appearance on cultural centrism...how ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 4:35pm by bobpursley

English1A
I agree on the wordiness: Take this as an example: <<A gesture does not always have to be linked with an utterance, nor does a person have to direct it to a perceiver. However to, have any kind of meaning it must be perceived by someone. It is commonly misconceived that...
Friday, October 30, 2009 at 5:44pm by bobpursley

English1A - Critical Thinking and Writing
Your second paragraph is too informal. Also you have at least one factual error. "Two people of different races may have the same cultural background, but not vice versa." The family of an Asian, for example, may be totally Americanized and have no identification with any ...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 8:49pm by Ms. Sue

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
I think your thesis is too broad: how people dress ....does not define sexual orienation.. Why dont you focus on a subgroup? Anytime you try to explain "people" you are going to suffer from making generalizations. If you focused on Goths or religious cults (the long hair, or ...
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by bobpursley

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Membership meaning belonging to society as far as gender goes. Girls doing girly things and boys doing male things. Children are taught from a young age to do these types of things and for instance if boys start wanting to wear nail polist or wear lipstick, society would not ...
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 3:07pm by Kuromi

English1A
This sentence is really awkward: As some forms may be universal with certain cultures, it might not be with others which can cause problems for some when they are not aware of what is allowed and what is not. Reword that. Short sentences make for focused thinking and ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by bobpursley

English1A - Critical Thinking and Writing
Yes I am an Asian and I can definitely relate, I too am born and raised in Hawaii. I was trying to explain the differences with race and ethnicity and maybe I wrote it wrong. I was trying to say that even though two people of the same race may have the same the same ethnicity...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 8:49pm by Kuromi

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
I only see one SHOULD and it says people should be seen for their true personality, other than that I see no other shoulds. How do i change that part? I checked websites on argumentative essays, and they all have shoulds in it. I'm not sure how to write an argument without ...
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 6:25pm by Anonymous

English1A-need help with thesis
More sites here: http://www.google.com/search?q=strong+thesis+statement&ie=utf-8&oe=utf-8&aq=t&rlz=1R1GGGL_en___US321&client=firefox-a
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Writeacher

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Again, I ask, "membership" in what? Why is "Prince" in quotation marks? Are you quoting someone? If so, cite your source. If not, remove the quotation marks. Same thing for "behind" in the 3rd paragraph. Be careful of too much generalizing. I have two granddaughters, ages 8 ...
Sunday, November 15, 2009 at 3:07pm by Writeacher

English1A
Previous post: http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1256345733 You've definitely made some progress. That's good. Now it's time to make some more progress. Are you unclear on what "catchy" means? You need something in that intro that MAKES THE READER WANT TO KEEP READING. ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Writeacher

English1A-need help with thesis
You wrote: "While some are struggling to survive in this world today, Americans should appreciate what they have and realize the benefits this country has to offer them; that with hard work, determination, and a good education, anyone can succeed with the right attitude." That...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Writeacher

English1A
Okay my professor approved of the second thesis, now I just need 3 solid arguments to support my thesis. I thought I would support it by discussing what is and the differences of racism, stereotyping, prejudice in my first paragraph. Second paragraph maybe discussing how ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Kuromi

english1A- Gender Myths Essay
Thesis: Despite the talks and stares of others, people of different gender identities have a right to express their individuality, and others should accept people for who they are and not judge those who are different based on appearance just because they do not live up to ...
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Kuromi

English1A
How does this sound? Culture plays a large role on how individuals communicate with one another, including how they express themselves. There are various ways of communication such as through speaking, sign language, or body movement. Although most cultures might share the ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Kuromi

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
I only see one SHOULD and it says people should be seen for their true personality, other than that I see no other shoulds. How do i change that part? I see another 'should' but that one was already there, you might have over looked that one. "people should know the difference...
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 6:25pm by Kuromi

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
I think your introduction needs a sentence telling one what is ahead. Your conclusion did a good job. An old rule is to tell em what you are going to say, say it, then tell em what you said. The term "melting pot" is not universally an agreed description of America, and you ...
Monday, October 19, 2009 at 4:33am by bobpursley

English1A
Writeacher, is this better? Greetings and Gestures Culture plays a large role on how individuals communicate with one another, including how they express themselves. There are various ways of communication such as through speaking, sign language, or body movement. Although ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:50pm by Kuromi

English1A
I need to come up with a thesis for my next essay regarding Race and Culture. I want to talk about how people judge others by the color of their skin or their race. For example, I feel offended that because I'm asian, people expect me to know my math and I don't. I am really ...
Thursday, October 15, 2009 at 8:13pm by Kuromi

English1A
Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different things to many ...
Monday, September 28, 2009 at 5:55pm by Kuromi

english1a- my thesis, is it better?
I re did my thesis.. Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Kuromi

English1A - Critical Thinking and Writing
In the very beginning, people would travel from all over the world . . . People are still coming here for opportunities and freedom. "opportunities; a chance" Delete the semicolon, and insert a comma. "who are of a foreign race . . ." Since America is a melting pot, made up of...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 9:45pm by Ms. Sue

english1a- my thesis, is it better?
Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different things to many ...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 6:26pm by Kuromi

english1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
I agree with Writeacher. If you want to research something about clothing and culture, you might try researching the history of women wearing pants. http://www.google.com/search?source=ig&hl=en&rlz=1G1GGLQ_ENUS342&q=women+pants+history&aq=f&oq=&aqi= My mother (born in 1905) ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Ms. Sue

english1A-need help with thesis
is this better? Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of freedom and opportunities, there is one dream that everyone strives for; the American Dream. The American Dream can mean different ...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Kuromi

English1A
I'm still having a bit of trouble with my introduction and thesis. This is what I have, I hope it's any better. Greetings and Gestures All culture groups have various ways of communicating with each other whether it is through speaking, sign language, or body movement. ...
Saturday, October 24, 2009 at 5:02am by Kuromi

english1A-need help with thesis
This is my intro on Individual Opportunity, a myth or reality. But my professor says that my thesis in the last sentences needs "more argument." Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of ...
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 at 4:57pm by Kuromi

English1A
Are we allowed to post my essay here for proofreading? why is only the first line showing up? Individual Opportunity: Myth or Reality (introduction) Many people have dreams whether it is to buy their dream car, dream house, or go on their dream vacation. Here in the land of ...
Monday, September 28, 2009 at 5:55pm by Kuromi

English1A-Critical Thinking and Writing
I need to write a 7 page essay and I need some ideas for my paper so I could think of a thesis. I wrote a paper earlier on Gender roles, I'm not sure who helped me, but it is similar to this except this one is a research paper. I need at least 7 sources. Argue and discuss ...
Tuesday, November 10, 2009 at 1:11am by Kuromi

English1A
Paragraph 1 is fine, of course! In para 2, there is one sentence with particularly awkward wording: "It is not only important on how the greeting is said, but also how it is done, such as touching and the movement of the body like waving or bowing." "...on how..."? What does ...
Monday, October 26, 2009 at 8:22pm by Writeacher

english1A - argument/these
Here is an alternative introduction. Throughout history gender roles and identities were based primarily on the human biological anatomy. From a very early age, girls were taught to be feminine and do girly things, while boys were taught to be masculine doing macho things. As ...
Saturday, October 3, 2009 at 4:37am by Kuromi

english1A - response to last post
Posted by Kuromi on Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm. quotes I'm choosing (2-4): Appearances by Carmen Vazquez "Men who are not pursuing sexual conquests of women at every available opportunity, who disdain sports, who choose to stay at home and be a house-husband, who are ...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 8:03pm by Kuromi

english1A- Need help with my argument/thesis
This is my introduction... Gender Myths Some people wear earrings, others do not. Some people wear nail polish, while others do not. Whatever the case is, there are some people, whether male or female, who dress a certain way, either get mistaken for the wrong gender or the ...
Friday, October 2, 2009 at 9:52pm by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Hi Miss Sue or anyone else. How is my introduction so for for my argumentative essay on Race and Culture? Society plays a big role on race and culture. Whether a person is black or white, Asian or Hispanic, there will always be that someone who will look at another person and ...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 6:13pm by Kuromi

English1A- Gender Myths Essay
Please learn to capitalize the first letter of any language, including English. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ You need to go back through this and do something about all the sweeping generalities you're writing. Mission: Critical (Fallacious Generalizations) A sweeping generalization ...
Wednesday, October 7, 2009 at 4:33pm by Writeacher

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Okay I changed my introduction a little to improve on it. Society plays a big role on race and culture. Whether a person is black or white, Asian or Hispanic, there will always be that someone who attempts to identify others based on their appearance such as the color of their...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 6:13pm by Kuromi

English1A
I'm doing a research project and chose "Greetings and Gestures" for my topic. So far I have my introduction and thesis. Greetings and Gestures All culture groups have various ways of communicating with one another. Some forms may be universal while others may vary with the ...
Friday, October 23, 2009 at 8:55pm by Kuromi

english1A - Need to think of an argument/thesis
But I'm not in High School, I'm in college and my professor encourages to write about anything we feel. These are the stories we are reading about this week and she wants our essays to be related to the stories somehow. Our discussion last class period was all about how people...
Thursday, October 1, 2009 at 3:53pm by Kuromi

English1A
This is far too long for an introduction, and far too detailed, as well. All the sentences in bold below need to go into the body of the paper somewhere. In their place you need to put something that will catch the reader's attention and make him/her WANT to keep reading your ...
Friday, October 23, 2009 at 8:55pm by Writeacher

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
Hi can someone proofread my introduction to a 7 page essay regarding Gender roles and Disney movies? Gender Stereotypes Society affects how the children of today perceive gender roles. From a very early age, the basic rules of membership are taught as girls are typically given...
Saturday, November 14, 2009 at 8:42pm by Kuromi

English1A- Critical Thinking and Writing
first two supporting paragraphs.... America has been known as the melting pot for a while now. But despite the many years of foreigners and immigrants traveling and living in the U.S., America is still separated in many ways due to racism and prejudices. What is the difference...
Sunday, October 18, 2009 at 6:13pm by Kuromi

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