Email.is quick, Texting is convenient. Facebook has photos, videos and games. But for all the fancy, multimedia modes of communication out there, nothing beats the thrill of opening the mailbox and finding a personnel letter, written and addressed to you. Writing letters by hand have a very unique and personal touch to it. While an email is just another form of electronic communication that you can only see, the joy of a letter written by hand is palpable. This is especially true when we want to correspond with our grandparents. Most grandparents don’t share the same fast paced existence of the today’s generation. Some of them use emails occasionally. They often tend to be forgotten in the course of our regular email, texting and social- networking. Sending a personnel letter to grandparents is a one way to show, we still think and care about them.
In old days correspondence was always by letter and how personnel this type of communication was. Nowadays, they rarely receive a letter. How nice it would be to give them opportunity to relieve the experience! It would add a touch of excitement to open a handwritten letter from us that includes a pictures, tiny stickers, drawing or other personalized items to make letter extra unique and special from a grandchild. Letters are emotionally very heavy and bearing. We can hold them close to our heart, literally. Besides being able to see what's written, we can touch the letter, smell it and feel it. Receiving a letter from a loved one is the next best thing to having them visit you in person and having them by your side. And sometimes, letters help us express our feelings in a way that we can't over the phone, through e-mail, or even in person. “Letters have always been a nice way to show someone when they are gone that you're thinking about them. Reading them now, after so many years, shows why we are as close as we are today."
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“Writing letters to grandparents convey the feelings much better than an email.”
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i wrote this paragraph plz let me know is it ok
how can I make it more concise to 250 word
below is the draft
Background
Pretend that you writing to the editor of your local newspaper. Your purpose is to convince its readers that rather than solely relying on e-mail, people should mail a letter to their loved ones every now and then. Following is your first draft.
Every now and then, instead of using e-mail, mail a letter to your grandparents. We live in a fast-paced world. We feel comfortable using computers to send e-mails and Instant Message. Nana doesn’t live in that time zone. Forget all those fancy fonts and emoticons or abbreviations like LOL. You point and click but Grandpa wants to hold something, unwrap a letter and smell it. A crayoned picture smells special, no scanner can do that. Their senses want to be used. He lives in a physical world, not an invisible one. Grandparents can touch something that is mailed. Sometimes as if touching the ink or pencil on paper helps them touch the writer. A picture can be held and used in so many ways. I get to see my grandkids’ handwriting is changing as they grow. I know how they feel just from the way they write the words. Give your grandparents the real thing that exists in time and space. Something to cherish rather than to be deleted.
Process
1. Revise the above rough draft into a final, polished product containing two paragraphs. Together, the two paragraphs must total 175 to 250 words. In addition, the paragraphs must reflect your writing style, as well as be effective for the purpose and audience. Be sure that one of the reasons you give for mailing a letter is the sensory experience (e.g., smell and touch)
I'll let others evaluate the style, but I can say right off that the grammar and spelling need some improvement. My corrections are in bold. There are awkward shifts between viewpoints (first, second, third person).
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Email is quick; texting is convenient. Facebook has photos, videos and games. But for all the fancy, multimedia modes of communication out there, nothing beats the thrill of opening the mailbox and finding a personal letter, written and addressed to you. Writing letters by hand has a very unique and personal touch to it. While an email is just another form of electronic communication that you can only see, the joy of a letter written by hand is palpable. This is especially true when we want to correspond with our grandparents. Most grandparents don’t share the same fast-paced existence of the today’s generation. Some of them use emails only occasionally. They often tend to be forgotten in the course of our regular email, texting and social networking. Sending a personal letter to grandparents is one way to show that we still think and care about them.
In the old days correspondence was always by letter, and how personal this type of communication was! Nowadays, they rarely receive a letter; how nice it would be to give them opportunity to relive the experience! It would add a touch of excitement to open a handwritten letter from us that includes pictures, tiny stickers, drawings or other personalized items to make letter extra unique and special from a grandchild. Letters are emotionally very heavy and bearing.? We can hold them close to our heart, literally. Besides being able to see what's written, we can touch the letter, smell it and feel it. Receiving a letter from a loved one is the next best thing to having them visit you in person and having them by your side. And sometimes, letters help us express our feelings in a way that we can't over the phone, through e-mail, or even in person. “Letters have always been a nice way to show someone when they are gone that you're thinking about them. Reading them now, after so many years, shows why we are as close as we are today."
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“Writing letters to grandparents conveys the feelings much better than an email.”
thx appreciated
revised
Email.is quick, Texting is convenient. Facebook has photos, videos and games. But for all the fancy, multimedia modes of communication out there, nothing beats the thrill of opening the mailbox and finding a personal letter, written and addressed to you. Writing letters by hand has a very unique and personal touch to it. While an email is just another form of electronic communication that you can only see, the joy of a letter written by hand is palpable. This is especially true when we want to correspond with our grandparents. Most grandparents don’t share the same fast paced existence of the today’s generation. Some of them use emails only occasionally. They often tend to be forgotten in the course of our regular email, texting and social- networking. Sending a personal letter to grandparents is a one way to show that, we still think and care about them.
In the old days correspondence was always by letter and how personal this type of communication was. Nowadays, they rarely receive a letter; how nice it would be to give them opportunity to relive the experience! It would add a touch of excitement to open a handwritten letter from us that includes a pictures, tiny stickers, drawings or other personalized items to make letter extra unique and special from a grandchild. Letters are emotionally very heavy and bearing. We can hold them close to our heart, literally. Besides being able to see what's written, we can touch the letter, smell it and feel it. Receiving a letter from a loved one is the next best thing to having them visit you in person and having them by your side. And sometimes, letters help us express our feelings in a way that we can't over the phone, through e-mail, or even in person. “Letters have always been a nice way to show someone when they are gone that you're thinking about them. Reading them now, after so many years, shows why we are as close as we are today."
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“Writing letters to grandparents conveys the feelings much better than an email.”
To make your paragraph more concise and fit within the 250-word limit, you can use the following revised version:
"Instead of relying solely on email, consider mailing a letter to your grandparents every now and then. In today's fast-paced world, we often find convenience in digital communication, but we must remember that our grandparents may not share the same technology-driven lifestyle. Sending a handwritten letter gives them a tangible connection, something they can hold and cherish. It's a personal touch that cannot be replaced by an email or text message.
In a world dominated by digital screens, the sensory experience of receiving a letter is unique and special. When your grandparents unwrap a letter, they can smell the ink on the paper and feel the texture of the handwritten words. A simple, crayoned picture from their grandkids can evoke a sense of joy that no scanner or digital image can replicate. Each stroke and curve of their handwriting carries a personal touch, allowing them to feel connected to their loved ones.
So, let's go beyond virtual communication and embrace the power of a handwritten letter. It allows our grandparents to truly experience our love and care in a way that technology cannot provide. Let's give them something to hold, to cherish, and to keep as a tangible reminder of our bond."
This revised version is concise and falls within the word limit while still conveying the sentiment and purpose of why mailing a letter to grandparents is important.