Could this be a good thesis? Could you please help me? In today's society many middle class people argue why they can not build wealth could this be because of wrong choices?
Let's shorten it to this.
Many middle class people argue why they can not build wealth.
In today's society, many middle class people argue that they cannot build wealth because of wrong choices.
This is a better statement of the thesis, but I don't know how you will be able to support it.
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Thank you so much Ms Sue
Certainly! A thesis statement is a concise statement that summarizes the main point or argument of an essay. In this case, your thesis statement suggests that middle-class people may struggle to build wealth due to erroneous choices. However, a good thesis statement should be clear, specific, and debatable. So, let's work on refining it.
To craft a stronger thesis statement, we need to further clarify the variables at play. Are you referring to specific wrong choices that are commonly made? Are there any specific socioeconomic factors that may contribute to these choices?
For instance, you could revise the thesis statement to something like: "The limited wealth accumulation among many middle-class individuals in modern society can be attributed to a combination of financial decisions influenced by societal norms and the overarching influence of economic inequality."
This revised thesis statement clearly identifies the focus of your argument and introduces two main factors that you will explore: societal norms affecting financial choices and economic inequality. With this thesis, you can then introduce evidence and arguments to support your claims.
Remember, a thesis statement should serve as a guide for your essay, providing a clear direction and setting the stage for the subsequent arguments and evidence you present.