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My writing has exhibited creativity by introducing a new perspective of stereotypical conventions that resulted in increased cognition through “A Closer Look: Analyzing Tangled (2012) and Its Deeper Critique of "Rapunzel" (1812). Firstly, I offer a new perspective on the purpose of the film “Tangled” (2010). Even within the first lines, I state that “peeking at the surface of …Tangled (2010)…most would presume that it is merely another movie created to blend in with contemporary female empowerment films such as Frozen (2013) or Brave (2012), as it clearly displays independently strong women. In all actuality, a closer look would reveal that its feminism is Disney’s way of transgressing the lesser known fairytale "Rapunzel" (1812).” I then analyze the characters of Rapunzel and the Mother of Rapunzel as transgressions of their hypo text’s counterparts, including examples such as Disney’s clever use of Rapunzel’s song ‘When Will My Life Begin?” that purposefully parallels the original damsel’s use of song to express her loneliness.
Here, I explicitly describe the commonly perceived purpose of “Tangled” (2010) as being feminism due to the fact that it is a conventional female empowerment film. Although, I exhibit creativity by introducing a new perception, or that it is actually a transgression of its hypo text. In this way, I create a “heightened state of mind” within my reader by enlightening him on the deeper transgressions of “Tangled” (2010) and therefore reforming a conventional mode of thought.

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