Can someone edit this? Please be forewarned that its a first draft so I am aware that it is not developed yet. Any feedback would help a lot.
Clearly, Jason Russell's Kony 2012 campaign proves how YouTube has altered our understanding of creativity from the change that abrogates something-- original into one that allows for progression. Within this context, Benjamin would argue that providing mere copies of original footage showing African children handling artillery and being kidnapped abrogates the authentic aura of the original scenes of such horrors.--- Nevertheless, this abrogation-- of the authentic aura through mass dispersing copies of the original scenes is what allowed for YouTube to assist Russell in creating a mass global initiative that progressed America politically and socially. Through gaining close to 100 million views and raising $10.3 million in the 2010-2011 fiscal year, Russell has progressed his initiative in increasing public Kony awareness, helping halt the VRA's efforts, and "creating a less complicated world." His influence also progressed Congress' decision to aid the African Union which in turn progressed US's international relations with Africa. The only substantial speaking role in the video aside from Russell is purposefully allotted to the graffiti artist, as he exemplifies the notion that humans do not have to be in a high position of power or extensively amazing beings in order to progress movements such as Kony 2012, as they merely need the proper tools and self-initiative to do so. This can clearly be related to the notion of creativity and therefore mechanical reproduction, as YouTube serves as the proper tool that helps induce progression through the self-initiative of its users.
I don't edit first drafts of anything!!
I can tell you right now, though, that it's far too much for one lone paragraph.
Here are some editing ideas for you to follow. Repost when this is more polished.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/composition/editing.htm
I don't proofread any first drafts but my own.
http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Proofreading.html
Sure, I can help you with editing the text. Here's a revised version:
Please note that this is a first draft, so it is not fully developed. I would greatly appreciate any feedback.
Clearly, Jason Russell's Kony 2012 campaign demonstrates how YouTube has changed our perception of creativity, shifting it from being merely about originality to facilitating progress. Within this context, Benjamin would argue that distributing mere copies of original footage showing African children handling weapons and being kidnapped diminishes the authenticity of the original scenes of such horrors. However, it was through this dissemination of copies, which eroded the authenticity, that YouTube helped Russell in creating a massive global initiative that advanced political and social causes in America.
With nearly 100 million views and $10.3 million raised in the 2010-2011 fiscal year, Russell has made significant progress in raising awareness about Kony, contributing to the efforts to combat the Lord's Resistance Army (LRA), and fostering a "less complicated world." Furthermore, his influence has pushed Congress to support the African Union, thereby improving US international relations with Africa.
In the video, apart from Russell, the only person given a substantial speaking role is the graffiti artist. This deliberate choice illustrates the idea that individuals do not need a position of power or extraordinary abilities to advance movements like Kony 2012. Instead, they require the right tools and the initiative to act. This aligns with the concept of creativity and mechanical reproduction, where YouTube serves as a tool that empowers users to drive progress through their self-initiative.
Please let me know if you need any further assistance or if you have any specific feedback in mind.