Posted by Camilla on Saturday, July 5, 2014 at 3:41am.
You’ve applied for a specific job in your field of study. The Human
Resources Department arranges an interview and tells you to bring with
you a polished piece of writing for them to evaluate your writing skills.
The paragraph must describe one particular experience you’ve had that
inspired you or guided you to choose the type of position for which you
Your audience is your potential employer and your purpose is to show
you have thought carefully about what and/or who has motivated you
toward this career choice and why. In addition, you want to convey your
enthusiasm for this position as it relates to your inspiring experience.
Take time to think about what your audience wants to know and strive
to reach a balance between informal and formal business writing.
1. Prewrite about your field of study and create a specific job for
which you might want to apply at a particular business or organization
in your area. Outline what that position would look like.
Brainstorm details, names, titles, and facts to provide depth to your
paragraph and enable you to write a polished paragraph.
2. Freewrite about the different experiences you’ve had that motivated
you to choose your area of study. Pick one on which to
focus—one that triggers sparks of enthusiasm. Review your prewriting
and choose what’s most pertinent to the experience and position.
Decide on an organizational pattern, such as a chronological outline,
and arrange those details into a logical, coherent flow.
3. Open a Word document and type the heading Paragraph 1. Begin
your rough draft with the topic sentence, in which you state the
position and place, as well as your reason for wanting to be hired
as it relates to your inspiring experience. Develop the experience
you organized in Step 2. Include not only details about the one
experience, but also show how that experience inspired you, particularly
as it relates the position for which you’re applying. Develop
your paragraph using clear, varied sentences containing concrete
words and transitions or connectives to create a logical flow. Show
enthusiasm, yet maintain a somewhat formal tone.
I WROTE :
It is an honour to begin my Medical Administrative Assistant career with you at Lakeshore General Hospital Birthing Center, and look forward in making a positive impact in the lives of your patients. Furthermore, Health Information Management professionals are responsible for organizing and managing large amounts of detailed health information. They also guarantee the privacy, accuracy, and security of this information. In fact, in recent past, there was one particular experience that changed my perspective towards these hard-working technicians. To begin with, I got pregnant at a very young age. With that being said, I informed the Birthing Center when I was on my way for labor. Then, a HIM professional kept in touch with me right away and took all the necessary information; as soon as I arrived she knew exactly who I was. The technician had prepared all my medical records in time for the doctor and the nurse; she was professional and well organized. Moreover, the technician ensured the rest of my stay to be stress free by taking care of everything in a very helpful and pleasant manner. Hence, motivated by my experience and the technician, I started my training at Penn Foster Career School in Laval. My training has involved taking courses in Office Procedures, Body Systems and Terminology, Basic Pharmacology, Office Finance and Medical Insurance, Confidentiality of Allied Health, and Medical Transcription. On the whole, with the education I have gained and the enthusiasm for the profession I have chosen, I know that I can be a vital part of the Health Information Management team at the Birthing Center in Lakeshore General Hospital serving your patients.
- English Essay - Writeacher, Saturday, July 5, 2014 at 11:03am
Please re-read the directions, especially section 3.
You are writing as if you've already been hired.
- English Essay - Writeacher, Saturday, July 5, 2014 at 11:39am
Another problem I see is that you seem to be quoting or copying/pasting from some promo publications or maybe even your textbook/study materials.
All this should be in your own words.
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