I am doing descriptive writing
I am currently constructing a weather scene, which is a bad rainy day. This will end up building more tension to my story.
Here is what I got so far...
Out the window next to me, the rain was pouring heavily, from the overcast of thick clouds. Gushes of rain was hammering against the window pane and slicing through the leaves on the bare tree. Water stood on the slippery roads, as passing cars fought their way through the gushing rain.
What else can I write?
Any Ideas?
All help will be very much appreciated
Get rid of repetitive words.
Make sure all subjects and verbs agree.
In that last sentence, was the water STANDING on the road or running across the road?
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I believe it was more dramatic with standing
Standing water usually occurs after the rain has stopped.
Running or rushing usually means it's still raining.
Which are you envisioning?
To further enhance the descriptive nature of your bad rainy day scene and build tension in your story, consider incorporating the following elements:
1. Sounds: Describe the auditory experience of the rain. For example:
- The drumming of raindrops on the roof and windows.
- The howling wind accompanying the downpour.
- The occasional rumble of thunder in the distance.
2. Sensory details: Engage the reader's senses by incorporating more sensory information:
- The cool, damp air that seeps through every crack, making the room feel colder.
- The pungent smell of wet earth and rain-soaked grass.
- The taste of humidity on the lips.
3. Visual details: Provide vivid imagery of the scene:
- The relentless sheets of rain, appearing almost like a cascading curtain in front of the window.
- The blurred outlines of objects in the distance due to the heavy rainfall.
- The droplets on the window pane, distorting the view outside.
4. Effects on surroundings:
- Describe the impact of the rain on nature, such as puddles forming on the ground and small streams trickling down the street.
- Mention how the rainwater collects in ditches and drains, creating a babbling, almost eerie sound.
- Talk about the leaves on the trees, trembling and rustling with every gust of wind, as if afraid of being washed away.
5. Emotional atmosphere:
- Describe the gloomy, gray essence of the day, with the rain creating a sense of foreboding.
- Portray the isolation and discomfort caused by the weather, highlighting characters seeking shelter or huddling together for warmth.
- Use metaphors or similes to compare the rain to tears or sadness, intensifying the mood.
Remember to juxtapose this weather scene with the events in your story to maintain the desired tension. Experiment with these suggestions and choose the ones that best suit your narrative.