I need help revising a MLK thesis statement.
"Martin Luther King Jr. uses structure and language to influence his readers."
very bland, i need a more popping one. any suggestions?
Is that the main idea of your paper? It's really not a thesis because there's no "you" in it ... that is, YOUR STANCE about his work.
What is YOUR OPINION about his writing? Give me one or two words.
Inspirational, understanding
"Martin Luther King was a very inspirational man, and just like him, his writing doesn't fall behind. His ability to make the reader feel what he felt on a personal level is amazing."
Is that good?
Also, you need much more specific words than "structure" and "language."
"Martin Luther King was a very inspirational man, and just like him, his writing doesn't fall behind. His ability to make the reader feel what he felt on a personal level is amazing."
is that good?
AND ... you'll need to decide if you'll write it all in past tense or all in present tense. Be consistent.
What you wrote is much better than the first one. How can you get rid of repetition, consolidate it into ONE sentence, and keep verb tense consistent?
"Martin Luther King was a very inspirational man, and just like him, his writing doesn't fall behind, his ability to make the reader feel what he felt on a personal level is very intreeging. "??
Oh, please!!! You've now created a run-on without getting rid of repetition and wordiness!! You can do better!
Study this, and try again:
http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/acadwrite/thesistatement.html
"Martin Luther King was a very inspirational man, and just like him, his writing doesn't fall behind. "
Martin Luther King was a very inspirational man, and his writing allowed his audiences to feel what he felt.
"just like him" is grammatically questionable + wordy/redundant.
Do you understand the concept of keeping verb tenses consistent??