Had to develop a paragraph using clear, varied sentences containing concrete words and transitions or connectives to create a logical flow. Need assistance in the following paragraph that describes on particular experience I had that inspired you or guided you to chose that type of position which I applied for.

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I’m replying to your career opportunity posted on your website at Pocono Medical Center, East Stroudsburg, PA, in Medical Billing and Coding. Having the experience watching the care the hospital gave to my father-in-law during his stay was inspiring. In addition, the Billing Department handled my mother-in-laws questions, with care, and patience’s during this difficult time for her. After much research I knew I wanted to pursue the Medical billing and Coding program; and that Penn Foster provided that opportunity. Upon completion, I have gained the knowledge and proficiency in medical billing and coding program. I also have the ability to multitask, team-oriented, and work well under pressure. I am confident that I could make a valuable contribution to the medical team serving your patients and insurance companies in a timely manner.

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Having the experience watching the care the hospital gave to my father-in-law during his stay was inspiring.
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I’m writing in response to the career opportunity posted on the Pocono Medical Center website in East Stroudsburg, PA. The experience I had with the hospital while my father-in-law was under their care truly inspired me. Witnessing the exceptional level of care and attention he received during his stay made me realize the important role that medical professionals play in ensuring the well-being of patients. Additionally, the Billing Department's handling of my mother-in-law's inquiries with empathy and patience during such a difficult time further solidified my decision to pursue a career in Medical Billing and Coding.

After conducting extensive research, I came to the conclusion that the Medical Billing and Coding program offered by Penn Foster would provide me with the necessary training and skills. Upon completion of the program, I have acquired a comprehensive understanding of the field and have attained proficiency in the necessary coding and billing processes. Furthermore, I have developed the ability to effectively multitask, work well in a team-oriented environment, and thrive under pressure.

I am confident that my combination of knowledge, expertise, and personal qualities would enable me to make a valuable contribution to the medical team at Pocono Medical Center. I am eager to utilize my skills to efficiently serve patients and assist insurance companies in a timely manner.