college essay cover letter
posted by chhristine on .
Can someone edit this
I was pleased to find that the University of Connecticut allowed for applicants to submit a writing supplement along with their applications. So, I have taken this opportunity to show the main experiences that I have experienced the past 4 years and their direct affects on my grades earlier in my high school career.
With that said, I think it is essential that you know that I wrote this supplement not with the intentions of evoking sympathy, but rather empathy. You see, there is no true way in which I can put you in my shoes. There is no extraordinarily remarkable way in which I can miraculously have you feel what I have felt and see what I have seen, just as there is no way to reverse time and redo my past. Thus, I have constituted this supplement with the intention of having you understand the stories behind my transcript and to give you a better understanding as to who I am. It is my best effort to having you see what I see, as I hope you come to understand me as a beneficial asset to the University of Connecticut.
Christine, you are still wordy. Most students do not do a cover letter, but I have to say, your second paragraph is really distracting from your story.
I would recommend this....
Dear Dean of Admissions (I would put his/her name in that salutation)
Attached is a supplemental letter to my admissions package, which contains some valuable and important information regarding me.
Thank you for reading it.
As I have written to you a couple of times before, Christine, very often, simpler is better. Shorter sentences are better (eye catching, and absorbed).
Print the letter on quality bond paper.
is the director of admissions the same as a dean of admssions?
and if so, would I just say; Dear Director of Admissions, Lee H. Melvin,
or would I just put dear Lee H. Melvin,
never mind mind I figured it out