English (PLEASE I NEED HELP)
posted by Laura on .
Read the following short excerpt of student writing. Use your vocabulary and grammar knowledge to determine which suggestions you would make to improve his or her grammar and word choice.
I really thought she loved me but I discovered her grave betrayal one afternoon. It was easy to figure out because she accidentally sent a text to me that was meant for him. I was confused by the text because it said, "Don't tell Mike." I felt insulted that she thought she could get away with this infidelity. At first I felt very angry bitter and hateful but then I felt so hopeless and depressed. I longed for her to call me. I thought if I could just hear her pleasing voice, maybe then I would not be filled with such bitterness. Instead of calling her I talked to another friend who is good at listening and feeling my pain. Talking with her makes me feel euphoric. I think I may be on the road to recovery.
What word would you suggest to replace the underlined word or words in this excerpt?
At first I felt very angry but then I felt (so hopeless) and depressed. I longed for her to call me.
So hopeless is the underlined sentence.. that's why i put in a parenthesys.