February 22, 2017

Homework Help: English

Posted by Sara on Tuesday, September 24, 2013 at 10:01am.

Please track the errors by editing this passage of writing. This is an exercise for my English homework. I have made a couple of changes or editing to the writing piece already, but I am not sure if there are more editing that needs to be made. Also, please evaluate the writing, grammar, style as well as content for this piece. Thanks!

**The brackets indicate the changes that I have made**.

Writing Piece:

The Alberta oil sands are being developed at an unprecedented rate for oil extraction. Consequently(,) there is a great deal of environmental degradation, habitat fragmentation and negative impacts to both wildlife populations and human health. These impacts include heavy metal toxicity, such as mercury in fish, human and other trophic level feeders through bioaccumulation. Arsenic, copper, lead and there(their) compounds are contaminants of concern. Organic contaminants include PAHs and other persistent organic pollutants. Metabolized aromatic hydrocarbons are especially a concern for human health. Air emissions are concerning (about) as a toxic release caused several school children from a local school to seek medical treatment from acute affectseffects of NOx and SOx. Additional concerns include hydrology and terrain changes to the landscape resulting in severe population declines for both muskrat and the Species at Risk woodland caribou. This environmental concern should be addressed through legislative (law) changes, and enforcement to the Species at Risk Act, and the Environmental Protection and Clean Water Acts.

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