posted by shan on .
please need proof Reading
Health promotion means what you can do to reduce the health risks and promote the wellness of a human being. This process directed towards enabling people to take action and support them in changing their lifestyle to move toward a state of optimal health. Health promotion includes health education, supportive environment, linkage and health promotion and health screening.
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"Health promotion" means actions that can reduce the health risks and promote the wellness of a human being.
This process encourages and supports people to take action in changing their lifestyles to move toward a state of optimal health.
Health promotion includes health education, supportive environment, and health screening.
I removed "linkage" from the last sentence because it makes no sense unless you explain what you mean. If only the people in your class understand the term, then you should know that other people won't! Either supply a definition within the sentence somehow or delete it.
I removed "health promotion" toward the end of your last sentence because it's repetitive and makes no sense.
i got it thanks.
As more A.p get awareness of activities that lead to good health and become knowledgeable about his health status, as a result the overall health of the patient will improve.
IS THIS SENTENCE IS CORRECT.
A.P IS NAME OF A PERSON.
No that sentence is not correct. I can't even get past the first 8 or 10 words!!
If A.P. is a substitute for someone's name, how can "As more" make sense?
Let me know how you'd correct those first 8 words or so, and I'll check it again.