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Posted by on Monday, February 18, 2013 at 11:19am.

We have to rewrite this correcting fragments and run on sentences can someone check my work below the original.


Scientists report (1) that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live, in the deep sea. Creatures in the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages. Which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientists believe that some species will die out, those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep sea, not much is known about the changes in their diets. Scientists estimate that up to 10 million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin. In the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton. Capture the sun and start the food cycle. (2) Wherever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter (3) that feeds the bottom dwellers.

This is my rewrite:

Scientist report that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live in the deep sea. Creatures in the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages, which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientist believe that some species will die out, and those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep sea, and not much is known about the changes in their diest. Scientist estimate that up to 10 million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin in the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton capture the sun and start the food cycle. Wherever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottomf dwellers.

Ms.Sue please check my work. Thank you.

  • english - , Monday, February 18, 2013 at 11:31am

    Scientist report<~~Something's wrong here; it needs to be either "Scientists report" or "A scientist reports" Which do you mean? that creatures living in the deep sea are in danger of starving to death. Millions of undiscovered species live in the deep sea. Creatures in the seabed are suffering from growing food shortages, which may be a result of rising sea temperatures. Scientist believe<~~?? that some species will die out, and those that can survive on a low food supply will continue living. Not much is known about the creatures that live in the deep sea, and not much is known about the changes in their diest.<~~typo? Scientist estimate<~~?? that up to 10 million species live in the depths of the sea. Most animals of the deep rely on food chains that begin in the lighted realms of the sea. Microscopic plants called phytoplankton capture the sun and start the food cycle. Wherever there are animal droppings, there is a constant rain of organic matter that feeds the bottomf<~~extra letter here dwellers.

    I find no run-ons or fragments in your corrected version, but you need to correct those other places I marked.

  • english - , Friday, March 13, 2015 at 2:40pm

    Also, with one extra correction, "Phytoplankton" is a proper noun and needs to be capitalized.

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